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Review of Frozen in Fear  
Review by Fi
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hi Sarah Kate ! This review comes from the board over at "The Grammar Garden's Gardeners" . This poem caught my eye because of its unique and alluring title and brief description.

*Umbrellab* After reading "Invalid Item" , I have these comments to offer: This is a beautiful tribute to our Saviour, relating the miracle of salvation and love that He gives freely.

You use beautiful and effective imagery, with lines such as A tear falls from my eye, / Only to freeze upon my trembling cheek and The soft kiss of dawn's first light / Melts away the ice... *Right* These are my favourite two lines, reflecting misery, the state I knew so well before Christ gave me new life, and perfect joy, the state I now stand in forever.

I really like the line third from the end, too: Now I see the light in the darkest situations *Right* as it broadens out and gives a lovely perspective on satisfaction in the storms of life.

The only suggestion I can offer is replacing the repetition of "corner" in the second couplet, as the word is in the first verse too.

Personally, I believe poems like these are better structured, as it lends more to the order of the piece and rhyme always compliments lines. Even using subtle rhyming can be most effective. Without a particular form, but with some of the words in the verses rhyming, I think this kind of poem is at its best. But it's your choice. *Star*

Thank you for sharing this beautiful poem with Writing.Com. I enjoyed the read and it has been a pleasure to review. Keep up the great work! *Thumbsup*

~ Kasia
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