Very witty and well done. The form is right on!! Good work. The message is strong. My favorite lines are the couplet at the end. "In general fools are rather a curse, but the intelligent ones are much worse." For my tastes any way, I thought some of the rhymes felt forced. For instance, the line "They change their tactic display meanest tact.." seemed forced to rhyme with fact. Keep writing and I'll keep reading.
What impresses me most about this piece--is its internal depth--.it exposes our human vulnerability. I liked the pacing of your sentences--the way you slow us down--to hear you speak. For me, anyway, the piece would be stronger if it was bit more concrete--what I mean by that--is if we knew what event the picture commemorated--or how these people came together to be photographer--or why it is n your album. I'm not suggesting--that it should be totally rewritten--not at all--it's lovely, but for me, if I had a stronger anchor--it would have been a stronger piece. Good Luck with this and keep writing.
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