First off, readers tend to stop at the first few sentences they read when it's awful. The First few pages is crucial to tag along your readers until the end. As for this, I'm sorry to say, I stopped at the 3rd sentence. You have wrong spellings and your first sentence, "I was in a car, driving to where i didint know. Actually i did know, but i wish that i didn't.", gave the novel a bad impression. Remember the famous saying? First impression lasts. Work towards that. Before you publish or let anyone see your work, make sure you have at least proofread it already.
Pls don't get offended as you have written this long, it means you have the patience and the potential to be a novelist. Work on it and maybe next time I'll be reading you on a book.
I love writings that goes smoothly when I read it. Just like what you did in here. The 'what-if' and 'hopeful' themed seemed to be effective. You did well!
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