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I really enjoyed the stroll through the house and down memory lane with Vincent. I could see the things he would miss.

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From the beginning, I tried to figure out who Vincent was talking to. If he's only thinking these things, then you can demonstrate that by putting the words in italics instead of quotation marks.

Your writing could be more condensed in a couple of places where there is quite a bit of repetition. For example:

Vincent stared at the indentures in the floor where a china cabinet stood on the other side of it. He also looked down at the indentures into the carpet where the table once stood.

Condensed Vincent stared at the indentures in the floor where the china cabinet and table each had once stood.

Be careful of overusing "was" and "were". This is considered passive writing and you really want to have active writing.

Connie was sitting at the table playing with her Ken and Barbie dolls. Becky was violently going through her toy chest looking for something. Whatever it was she hadn’t found it yet. Her toys were flying everywhere.

Example Connie sat at the table and played with her Ken and Barbie dolls. Becky violently searched through her toy chest. Whatever toy she looked for had not been found. Her toys flew everywhere.

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Vincent was probably around age seventy and had been married to his wife for fifty years. He had four children and several grandchildren. His family is loving and thoughtful. Although I saw the nostalgic side of Vincent, I would have enjoyed seeing more depth to his character.

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I thought the ending was awesome! But they should have told Vincent and Helen about buying the house before they packed everything up. #smh

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You hooked me with the first line. I felt like I started getting to know Dwight right away. He reminded me of the "Grumpy Old Men" movie where he was gruff on the outside, but a teddy bear on the inside.
Your descriptions of Dwight were wonderful so that I could picture him as I read through the story.
The flow was great from your beginning to your middle and finally the end. There was nothing choppy about the transitions and I didn't stumble do to any grammatical or punctuational errors.

- My only comment is that you dropped in and out of the point of view frequently. In such a short story it can be difficult to keep up when you do that. It's something to watch for the future.

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He was an older gentleman. He probably needs a lens replacement in each eye due to cataracts. He is highly independent and doesn't like anyone to do anything for him. He would prefer to drive, and he refused to take help when changing the tire. He has also had a difficult time grieving for the loss of his son, who I assume he lost on 9/11. He probably went down in the Pennsylvania field. This probably could have been made a little clearer, but there was enough information that alluded to it that I pretty much got it.

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I was really impressed with this piece. Great job!

- OOoo... I love Gus. He reminds me of my grandpa that just passed away. So much about him made me smile. But my grandma would never be caught dead in a casino, and she passed at 95 years old. My grandpa was 88. This was truly a fun story to read.

- The following passage doesn't seem to go with anything being said before or after. I would consider just cutting it from the scene. "Gus sighed. Desi was never much for cooking. They went out a lot."

Be careful about stepping out of POV. In this sentence, you switch from third person POV to narrative POV. "A fly buzzed near his crusty, old ear."

- OH my! It's so funny that you brought up the show, Better Late Than Never. We watched it and laughed so hard we were crying. Poor Gus, that he forgot he needed a passport. And how awful that his kids rarely went to visit him. My Mom and Dad cared for both my grandparents until they passed away. That's as it should be! But seriously, this was a fun read!

- That a retired demon, masquerading as the village wizard, hated Halloween. I would have liked to see the dialogue in your mind as you came up with this one. I can see the questions that went through your head. What if there was like this old demon? And what if he retired? Where would he go? Oh, a village with simple monsters might be an interesting place. And instead of a demon, he can be a wizard to cover up his dark side. And wait... what if he didn't like Halloween? Great premise for this short story. It's really original.

And, OH MY WORD, I about spit out my drink when Monty told the trickster that he could rearrange where his penis was. That got him back pretty good.

- There was really nothing wrong with your story. Rather, the problem was more with the writing mechanics. See my note below.

- There are places where you need apostrophes. You need to be careful about comma placement. And there are missing and incorrect spelled words in some of the sentences. I'd like to suggest a free version of Grammarly which you can find at grammarly.com. It has helped me immensely in this area.

- I would really love to read some additional stories, or a larger story about this character.

-The story was unusual and original. You took the idea of the retirement home or nursing home to a whole new level. Wow! I also liked the originality of how they communicated.

- With all of the interesting details, I thought it was kind of a let down that they killed the old people via firing squad. You could think up a cool and original way to kill them or bury them. Not that I think they should be killing old people, but you get what I'm saying. I'm not really that morbid.

- I would like to know more about this dystopian setting, but then that wasn't the assignment. So if you write more in the future, let me know. It's a different genre for me, but it does get the imagination going.