My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.
THE POEM
A day at the beach framed between the waves that crash on the seashore.
WHAT I LIKED
I loved how the poem progressed to tell a story. Well done!
STRUCTURE
This is free form poem. There were no set rythming patterns.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/ punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read.
DESCRIPTIONS
I liked: "Dark clouds gather ominously above the scavenging seagulls"
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
I have no suggestions for improvement. The poem progressed line by line as it told it's story. I could picture everything. I loved how the repetition of the last line, "crash upon the seashore" ties the poem together. Very good storytelling!
My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.
THE POEM
July is a steady month - known for summer and vacations, but as memories fade, just how steady was it?
WHAT I LIKED
I liked the visuals the poem evoked. Simple, yet succinct word play puts the reader in the moment.
STRUCTURE
This is free form poem. There was no set rythme patterns.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to make the poem easy to read.
DESCRIPTIONS
I liked: "as the skies cast shadows over July."
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
I have no suggestions for improvement. With few words the author conveys vivid visuals and evokes emotions well. Everyone thinks of July as summer. It's time to enjoy the nice weather, play, go on vacations, and yet, every so often, carefree summer can be haunted by shadows. While the poem hints at weather changes and life obligations, I think uncertainty can be whatever is challenging you in your own life. It's this juxapostion, well done, that dares the reader to go deeper.
My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.
THE POEM
The poem tells a story through weather and storms that mirror the highs and lows of our own life.
WHAT I LIKED
I loved the word play; it deepened the expression of the poem. I felt like I went a journey and discovered my own weathered traveled life.
STRUCTURE
This is free form poem. There was no set rythme scheme.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read.
DESCRIPTIONS
I liked: "Rainbows ribboned across sunlit skies" Great visual with succinct wording.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
I have no suggestions for improvement. The title fits the poem well. A great read that challenges the reader to take time and reflect, leaving one on a positive note.
My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.
THE POEM
A poem about light, the power of it's reflection, and that special something that hovers just above the light.
WHAT I LIKED
I enjoyed the word play; it deepened the expression of the poem and made me think of different angles of interpretation.
STRUCTURE
This is a cinquain poem. This a 5 line stanza poem. The lines are 2, 4. 6, 8 and 2 syllables.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling mistakes. The poem is easy to read.
DESCRIPTIONS
I liked: "light is dancing" -- light is electric, vibrant, and alive. Light gives life.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
I loved the flow of the poem and the invitation to give light your own interpretation. Was it a lover basking in the light of lovemaking or simply the early morning twilight breaking out the positivity in one's soul? I enjoyed this poem very much!
My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.
THE POEM
This poem deal with nature, specifically spring.
WHAT I LIKED
I enjoyed the visual and how it put me in the moment.
STRUCTURE
This is a haiku. A haiku is a short form of Japanese poetry, traditionally with 3 lines, and a 5,7,5 syllable pattern. The poem here matches traditional form.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling mistakes. The poem is easy to read.
DESCRIPTIONS
I liked: "A cardinal pair" - It was descriptive enough to picture two red birds on an early spring tree branch with green buds just popping out.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
The haiku also had a challenge - not to use the letter "E." Very good job writing a visual without that letter! The haiku did a great job capturing the following elements; simplicity, directness of expression and intensity. Well done!
My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.
THE POEM
The poem is a relaxing camping experience during the summer at a lake.
WHAT I LIKED
I loved the progression of the story in the poem. A succinct use of words had me right there relaxing and enjoying all the day had to offer. A wonderful experience of the five senses.
STRUCTURE
This is free form poem. There were some stragetic rhymes, but no set patterns.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML. It makes the poem easy to read.
DESCRIPTIONS
I liked: "Gliding across glass" when describing canoeing across the lake, but honestly, the poem is full of rich description.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
The poem opens with an invitation for you to close your eyes and imagine. It comes full circle when it does the same at the end. Brilliant. The first invitation plants the hint of being transported to another time and place. The 2nd invitation leaves you longing to visit Northwoods. An enjoyable, heartwarming poem!
My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.
Thank you for entering the Bard's Hall Cupid Slam Contest for FEB 2024. Since this is a unique contest, here is what I'm looking for:
Must slam that beastly little arrow-flinger, CUPID!
Must be Poetry Only, any form or free verse -- doesn't matter so long as it's just plain AWFUL!
Line Count up to 60 or fewer. Place line count at the bottom of the poem.
This poetry entry MUST be written for this contest, February 2024! If it's a leftover slam from another time and place it will be disqualified.
Remember that "bad poetry" doesn't mean just misspellings. We are looking for the really creative kind of "bad" that makes us cringe and groan over its terribleness!
A ONE-STAR RATING is the ultimate goal, here. We will award the "best" one-starred poems as the winners.
And now... onto the review....
THE POEM
Cupid shoots the arrows, spreading the love.
WHAT I LIKED/AKA CUPID SLAM aka GOOD, BAD, or UGLY:
SLAM: GOOD. Cupid is told to go away until next year.
Cupid is doing what cupid does.
STRUCTURE
This is a rythming poem with the 2nd and 4th lines rythming. The 1st and 3rd lines do not rythme.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
There's not much of a slam. The poem has a nice flow to it. Worthy of a 4.5 Star.
Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall FEB 2024 Contest. Line count was listed in accordance with the contest rules.
My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.
Thank you for entering the Bard's Hall Cupid Slam Contest for FEB 2024. Since this is a unique contest, here is what I'm looking for:
Must slam that beastly little arrow-flinger, CUPID!
Must be Poetry Only, any form or free verse -- doesn't matter so long as it's just plain AWFUL!
Line Count up to 60 or fewer. Place line count at the bottom of the poem.
This poetry entry MUST be written for this contest, February 2024! If it's a leftover slam from another time and place it will be disqualified.
Remember that "bad poetry" doesn't mean just misspellings. We are looking for the really creative kind of "bad" that makes us cringe and groan over its terribleness!
A ONE-STAR RATING is the ultimate goal, here. We will award the "best" one-starred poems as the winners.
THE POEM
Cupid is a sweetie as he goes about looking for lovers.
WHAT I LIKED/AKA CUPID SLAM aka GOOD, BAD, or UGLY:
SLAM: GOOD. Cupid is a jolly fellow with fluffy wings. He smiles and giggles and is a sweet cutie with rosy cheeks.
It's a pretty sweet, kindhearted description.
STRUCTURE
This is a free form poem with no apparent rythme scheme.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
No slam, here, just love little baby Eros. Worthy of a 4 star.
Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall FEB 2024 Contest. Line count was listed in accordance with the contest rules.
My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.
Thank you for entering the Bard's Hall Cupid Slam Contest for FEB 2024. Since this is a unique contest, here is what I'm looking for:
Must slam that beastly little arrow-flinger, CUPID!
Must be Poetry Only, any form or free verse -- doesn't matter so long as it's just plain AWFUL!
Line Count up to 60 or fewer. Place line count at the bottom of the poem.
This poetry entry MUST be written for this contest, February 2024! If it's a leftover slam from another time and place it will be disqualified.
Remember that "bad poetry" doesn't mean just misspellings. We are looking for the really creative kind of "bad" that makes us cringe and groan over its terribleness!
A ONE-STAR RATING is the ultimate goal, here. We will award the "best" one-starred poems as the winners.
And now... onto the review....
THE POEM
Blindfolded Cupid hit his target in an open field.
WHAT I LIKED/AKA CUPID SLAM aka GOOD, BAD, or UGLY:
SLAM: GOOD. Well, Cupid is blindfolded.
Cupid's arrow is like a heart tipped missile.
STRUCTURE
This is a free form poem with no rythme scheme.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
With an ode to Shakespeare, and a couple of thees and thines, the poem tells a story of a wayward arrow with a bad result. Bad poetry, but the slam is a little tame with a heart tipped missile.
Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall FEB 2024 Contest. Line count was listed in accordance with the contest rules.
My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.
Thank you for entering the Bard's Hall Cupid Slam Contest for FEB 2024. Since this is a unique contest, here is what I'm looking for:
Must slam that beastly little arrow-flinger, CUPID!
Must be Poetry Only, any form or free verse -- doesn't matter so long as it's just plain AWFUL!
Line Count up to 60 or fewer. Place line count at the bottom of the poem.
This poetry entry MUST be written for this contest, February 2024! If it's a leftover slam from another time and place it will be disqualified.
Remember that "bad poetry" doesn't mean just misspellings. We are looking for the really creative kind of "bad" that makes us cringe and groan over its terribleness!
A ONE-STAR RATING is the ultimate goal, here. We will award the "best" one-starred poems as the winners.
And now... onto the review....
THE POEM
Cupid is kinda smelly when he goes into action.
WHAT I LIKED/AKA CUPID SLAM aka GOOD, BAD, or UGLY:
SLAM: BAD. His best is like a fart that smells worse than the rest. It's descriptive but it's only 1 slam and doesn't quite raise to the level of Ugly.
STRUCTURE
This is a rythming poem that has an ABAB rythme scheme.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
While intentionally bad, the cupid slam comes off a bit tame. Worthy of a 1.5 star.
Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall FEB 2024 Contest. Line count was listed in accordance with the contest rules.
My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.
Thank you for entering the Bard's Hall Cupid Slam Contest for FEB 2024. Since this is a unique contest, here is what I'm looking for:
Must slam that beastly little arrow-flinger, CUPID!
Must be Poetry Only, any form or free verse -- doesn't matter so long as it's just plain AWFUL!
Line Count up to 60 or fewer. Place line count at the bottom of the poem.
This poetry entry MUST be written for this contest, February 2024! If it's a leftover slam from another time and place it will be disqualified.
Remember that "bad poetry" doesn't mean just misspellings. We are looking for the really creative kind of "bad" that makes us cringe and groan over its terribleness!
A ONE-STAR RATING is the ultimate goal, here. We will award the "best" one-starred poems as the winners.
And now... onto the review....
THE POEM
Cupid gets drunk with shooting off his arrows.
WHAT I LIKED/AKA CUPID SLAM aka GOOD, BAD, or UGLY:
SLAM: BAD. Cupid put on women's clothing as he got dressed.
It's a slam, but could be more creative.
STRUCTURE
This is a rythming poem with an ABCBC rythme scheme.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
While intentionally bad, the cupid slam comes off a bit tame. Worthy of a 1.5 star.
Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall FEB 2024 Contest. Line count was listed in accordance with the contest rules.
My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.
Thank you for entering the Bard's Hall Cupid Slam Contest for FEB 2024. Since this is a unique contest, here is what I'm looking for:
Must slam that beastly little arrow-flinger, CUPID!
Must be Poetry Only, any form or free verse -- doesn't matter so long as it's just plain AWFUL!
Line Count up to 60 or fewer. Place line count at the bottom of the poem.
This poetry entry MUST be written for this contest, February 2024! If it's a leftover slam from another time and place it will be disqualified.
Remember that "bad poetry" doesn't mean just misspellings. We are looking for the really creative kind of "bad" that makes us cringe and groan over its terribleness!
A ONE-STAR RATING is the ultimate goal, here. We will award the "best" one-starred poems as the winners.
And now... onto the review....
THE POEM
Cupid has a history of poor matchmaking hijinks.
WHAT I LIKED/AKA CUPID SLAM aka GOOD, BAD, or UGLY:
SLAM: UGLY ENOUGH. Cupid has flimsy wings, tattered and fragil. A love guru he's not.
The poet gives plenty of reasons for Cupid to retire.
STRUCTURE
This is a rythming poem with an AABB rythme scheme. Each stanza has 4 lines.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
The slams are ugly enough to be ugly, but I've seen uglier. Worthy of a 1 star review.
Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall FEB 2024 Contest. Line count was listed in accordance with the contest rules.
My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.
Thank you for entering the Bard's Hall Cupid Slam Contest for FEB 2024. Since this is a unique contest, here is what I'm looking for:
Must slam that beastly little arrow-flinger, CUPID!
Must be Poetry Only, any form or free verse -- doesn't matter so long as it's just plain AWFUL!
Line Count up to 60 or fewer. Place line count at the bottom of the poem.
This poetry entry MUST be written for this contest, February 2024! If it's a leftover slam from another time and place it will be disqualified.
Remember that "bad poetry" doesn't mean just misspellings. We are looking for the really creative kind of "bad" that makes us cringe and groan over its terribleness!
A ONE-STAR RATING is the ultimate goal, here. We will award the "best" one-starred poems as the winners.
And now... onto the review....
THE POEM
Cupid is back to do his yearly duty.
WHAT I LIKED/AKA CUPID SLAM aka GOOD, BAD, or UGLY:
SLAM: UGLY. He's a little creep with pudgy cheeks and wears wrinkled Huggies with tattered lace.
Great descriptions! Easy to visualize.
STRUCTURE
The first 3 lines of the stanza rythme with the 4th line rythming with every 4th line. Subtle, yet catchy.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
Well done ugly. Cupid's slams are visual and "ewww" worthy.
Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall FEB 2024 Contest. Line count was listed in accordance with the contest rules. A well earned 1 star!
My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.
THE MEMOIR
A dedication to a beloved pet.
WHAT I LIKED
A very heartfelt memoir that connects on an emotional level.
POV NARRATION/TENSE
This is told in the first person by an unnamed narrator. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.
THEME
For me, I picked out the theme of reflection. A beloved pet touched the author's heart and will be missed.
EMOTIONAL BEATS How well does the emotional beat resonate with the reader? Great; Good; Okay.
The author drew a picture of how they've grown from sharing their life with their pet.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. I might suggest spacing between the paragraphs and using WDC ML to make it easier on the eyes to read.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
Suggestion as mentioned above. The writing is candid, honest, and sincere.
My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.
THE STORY
A young girl has a weighty decision to make between music and sports.
WHAT I LIKED
I liked the presentation. Good use of WDC ML to make the story easy to read and understand.
POV NARRATION/TENSE
This is told in the third person limited from Bionna's perspective. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.
DIALOGUE
There's a good blend of dialogue and narration. I would suggest an edit for dialogue tags. Use only "he said" or "she replied" in tags to identify the speaker only, if you have to. Put action in a separate sentence. Put the action first, then the dialogue.
FOR EXAMPLE, AS WRITTEN: "I know why you keep having these bad dreams," said Trionne as she look at her daughter.
MY SUGGESTION: Trionne looked at her daughter with a sympathetic smile. "I know why you keep having these bad dreams."
DESCRIPTIONS
There's enough to set the scenes, but this is something that could be expanded on. I know there's a word count, so I might suggest a strategic edit using a good economy of words and focusing on the five senses. How vivid was the dream? What does the power ball field smell like? What's her sense of touch after the accident?
SETTING
TIME: futuristic
PLACE: fantasy setting
This is something that is clarified for the reader.
CHARACTERS
Bionna
There's enough here to understand her motivations. She enjoys both music and sports and is torn about a career.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling mistakes. I might suggest a minor edit for punctuation. There's a run on sentence starting with the paragraph, "Several hours later..."
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
Suggestions as mentioned above. The opening engages the reader. This is a very creative and imaginative that the reader can empathize with as Bionna goes through her struggles.
My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.
THE POEM
A poem about a flower, how it grows, and how it spreads love.
WHAT I LIKED
There was a nice rhythmic flow to the poem that made it easy to read.
STRUCTURE
This is free form poem with rythming couplets making up the stanzas.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML.
DESCRIPTIONS
I liked: "the windless summers warming heat shines on all your colors."
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
I liked the title and thought it was reflective of the poem. I also liked the ending line where it reinforced the power of nature. A very expressive poem.
My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.
THE STORY
Serena finds a remote beach to spend some "me" time, and meets Ryan, but she doesn't really get to know him until there's danger.
WHAT I LIKED
I liked the connection the characters made. The author did a great job making it feel natural and warm even though they just met.
POV NARRATION/TENSE
This is told in the third person limited from Serena's perspective. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.
DIALOGUE
There's a good blend of dialogue and narration. Dialogue tags were used appropriately.
DESCRIPTIONS
The descriptions were just right! Great visual description to open up the short story and keep the reader reading. I felt like I was at the beach with Serena and Ryan.
SETTING
TIME: modern day
PLACE: Unnamed Australian beach
This is something that is clarified for the reader.
CHARACTERS
Serena and Ryan
They're both private people, and yet they seem to gravitate toward one another on a deeper level.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. I might suggest a spacing between each paragraph to make it easier on the eyes. Font and size were good for reading.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
Suggestion as mentioned above. The opening engages the reader and piques their curiosity.
My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.
INTERNAL DIALOGUE
The narrator is confused which Wednesday it is.
FOLLOWED PROMPT?
Internal dialogue based on the picture prompt?
Placed word count in the item.
WHAT I LIKED
The title is interesting and piques the reader's interest.
POV NARRATION/TENSE
This is told in the first person by an unnamed narrator. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.
THEME
Sometimes we let our thoughts wander and entertain just about any scenario that pops into our mind.
EMOTIONAL BEATS How well does the emotional beat resonate with the reader? Great; Good; Okay.
I think the narrator is a bit agitated.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. If anything, I might increase the font size on the item to make it easier to read.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
The opening intrigues the reader. I can honestly say I was just as confused as the narrator when it came to the next NEXT Wednedsay. Good luck in the Bard's Hall contest.
My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.
INTERNAL DIALOGUE
A young person emotionally deals with the death of a parent.
FOLLOWED PROMPT?
Internal dialogue based on a picture prompt?
Placed word count in the item?
WHAT I LIKED
The ending was very hopeful.
POV NARRATION/TENSE
This is told in the first person by an unnamed narrator. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.
THEME
I picked up on a theme of dealing with loss.
EMOTIONAL BEATS How well does the emotional beat resonate with the reader? Great; Good; Okay.
The narrator worked through some heavy thoughts to find comfort.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
The opening intrigues the reader by noting the crack the sidewalk which can be a parallel for the crack in the narrator's emotional well being. The writing is candid and sincere. Good luck in the Bard's Hall contest.
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