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| 3. pathya vat (#82) | ID #659277 |
Posted: 7-15-2009 @ 8:50 pm EDT Edited: 7-19-2009 @ 12:49 am EDT |
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Memory
Drift out in time
hope to see you
there right on cue
in my mind, flash.
Sing our song, please.
Don't let me crash
problems rehash
to stain soft skin.
Soon, I will fall
never to again
feel that sharp pain;
the though of you.
"Pathya Vat.
This form has its origin in Cambodia. It belongs to the family of Than Bauk. Pathya Vat contains four lines of four syllables, the both middle lines rhyme.
Made visual:
xxxa
xxxb
xxxb
xxxc"
"If desired you can make a chain of Pathya Vat stanzas. You have to use the last word of the previous stanza, to rhyme with the second and third line of the next stanza."
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| 2. gayatri meter (#98) | ID #659273 |
Posted: 7-15-2009 @ 8:30 pm EDT Edited: 7-17-2009 @ 5:21 pm EDT |
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Song for Athene
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=hyeC9xC08dg
Raise your voice to the sky,
hearts in hand, uplifted.
Push the dark light away
and sing Hallelujah.
Gayatri Meter
The only difference with the Gayatri mantra “Tripada Gayantri” is that the syllables are divided in 4 pada of 6 syllables. In total the syllables remain 24 but in this case the dividing of the syllables over four lines changes the rhythm of the Gayatri mantra.
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| 1. englyn milwr (#21) | ID #659272 |
Posted: 7-15-2009 @ 8:30 pm EDT Edited: 7-16-2009 @ 1:19 am EDT |
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From Hall to Fall
Enter captain, tall and proud,
in the mess hall nice and loud
saluting men in a crowd.
On a plane soldiers sit strong,
not worried about right or wrong,
ready to jump, not prolong.
Bullets puncture hot and deep
with blood and flashes out seep
a body of tears grounds keep.
Each side fights with hopes to win
all suffer the mortal sin
of pain suffered deep within.
The boy shall not become a man
when lost in war that began
from that one old battle plan.
What started off as training
with all will power draining
and make battles less straining.
From mess hall to the last fall
in mud and aching some will crawl
with the goal of life for all.
Form = englyn milwr
As explained in the Poetry Forms book:
This type of poem often is about military, war or leaders but it is not limited per say. I chose to follow the topic anyways.
Syllable Count and Rhyme Scheme:
seven syllables A
seven syllables A
seven syllables A
seven syllables B
seven syllables B
seven syllables B
seven syllables C
seven syllables C
seven syllables C
and so on until poem is complete.
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