Whispers of the Past (Book) http://www.Writing.Com/main/books.php/item_id/1610946-Whispers-of-the-Past Reviewer notes: This version is filled with grammar errors, typos, obvious wrong words, etc. It's a true rough draft. This is written for an adult audience. What I'm looking for are your opinions on the story. Are there areas you'd like to see expanded? Areas I went into too much needless detail? Are ther...[Read Full Post] Wed, 10 Feb 2010 23:50:57 EST http://www.Writing.Com/main/books/entry_id/674806 Mackenzie sat and stared at the pieces in the box for a moment. Glancing up, she couldn't see or hear Kaylee. She figured that she was working in the bedroom again and wouldn't mind if Mackenzie sat resting for a few more minutes. She remembered the last time she had elevation sickness and it wasn't something she wanted to get again. The ...[Read Full Post] Wed, 04 Nov 2009 02:38:54 EST http://www.Writing.Com/main/books/entry_id/674662 Mackenzie stood by the front door for a moment, looking at the cameo in her hand. As the scene had played out before her, she felt so sad and upset for Paul and Elizabeth. Based on the emotions they'd shown right near the end, it was obvious that they didn't really want to be apart, but felt like they didn't have a choice in the matter. Ma...[Read Full Post] Thu, 05 Nov 2009 02:35:32 EST http://www.Writing.Com/main/books/entry_id/674807 "Oh, Jake," a voice called out. Mackenzie found herself wincing at the high pitched voice and looked up at the top of the stairs where it had come from. Standing there was a petite woman with platinum blonde hair and pale skin. She was wearing a black dress with a pretty gold vest that reached down almost the length of the dress. Around her...[Read Full Post] Fri, 06 Nov 2009 22:25:32 EST http://www.Writing.Com/main/books/entry_id/675121 Mackenzie stood for a moment in the middle of the room by the fountain. Rubber her thumb over the stones in the bracelet, she lifted it to her mouth. Exhaling through her mouth, directly on the stones, she watched them to see how they would react. The condensation from her breath quickly dissipated. A thoughtful frown crossed her face as she walked t...[Read Full Post] Fri, 13 Nov 2009 02:06:49 EST http://www.Writing.Com/main/books/entry_id/675970 Mackenzie looked over at her friend, hoping to share what she had seen while walking around, but one look at her face made Mackenzie decide to remain silent. She couldn't remember the last time she'd seen such a stormy look on Kaylee's face. She began to wonder how comfortable her stay would be since she was so sensitive to other people&#39...[Read Full Post] Sat, 28 Nov 2009 12:47:54 EST http://www.Writing.Com/main/books/entry_id/677904 Kaylee stopped the car in front of the lodge and turned off the engine. With the ceasing of the sound of the tires on the gravel and the engine, a deep quiet settled over the car. Kaylee looked out the window at the lodge and gave a sigh before speaking. "Well, here we are, again." It was a few more moments before she moved to open her door. ...[Read Full Post] Sat, 28 Nov 2009 12:47:03 EST http://www.Writing.Com/main/books/entry_id/677906 Mackenzie pushed open the door to the bedroom where she'd seen Kaylee enter earlier. "You in here still, Kaylee?" Kaylee backed out of the closet, dust smudged across one cheek and a spider web caught in her hair. "Yeah, I want to show you something. Come take a look at this." Smothering a smile at her friend's appearance...[Read Full Post] Sat, 28 Nov 2009 12:59:04 EST http://www.Writing.Com/main/books/entry_id/677911 Mackenzie slowly pulled the pearls out of the box. These pearls seemed to be of exceptional quality and matched each other almost perfectly. She felt that these pearls were probably harvested the original way and weren't from farmed oysters. Setting the box down on the table, the lid shut on the strand of pearls. All of a sudden, Mackenzie had pe...[Read Full Post] Sat, 28 Nov 2009 13:00:56 EST http://www.Writing.Com/main/books/entry_id/677912 Mackenzie stood up from dusting the bottom of the cheval mirror. Stretching, she looked around the room. The window was clean and a stream of bright sunlight flooded the room. All of the furniture was dust free and mutely reflecting the light. It was all a sign of hard work in a satisfying way. "Kaylee," Mackenzie said, "we should take...[Read Full Post] Sat, 28 Nov 2009 13:05:07 EST http://www.Writing.Com/main/books/entry_id/677913 Mackenzie shifted in her seat as she felt the ice pack begin to become uncomfortable on her ankle. Deciding it had been 15 minutes, she pulled the ice pack off and removed the rag Kaylee had put under it to keep it from burning her skin. Looking closer at her ankle, she winced at how ugly it looked. She shook her head at herself because she knew that ...[Read Full Post] Sat, 28 Nov 2009 13:08:13 EST http://www.Writing.Com/main/books/entry_id/677914 Warning: You are about to hit "NaNo Filler." When you read the rest of the book, please just feel free to note which parts you think are still important to the book. That way, it will allow me to target the parts I need to highlight and hit the delete key on. Mackenzie sat in the chair, both ...[Read Full Post] Sun, 21 Feb 2010 19:12:41 EST http://www.Writing.Com/main/books/entry_id/677917 When Mackenzie woke up in the morning, the sun was already streaming in the windows and warming her room. As she shifted in bed, a sharp pain shot up her ankle and caused her to gasp in pain. She quickly reached over for her pain medication and the glass of water sitting there. She figured that it wasn't that smart to take them on an empty stomac...[Read Full Post] Sat, 28 Nov 2009 14:06:11 EST http://www.Writing.Com/main/books/entry_id/677923 The next morning, Mackenzie woke up to the sun just beginning to shine in the windows. She smiled knowing that she was not going to waste the day in bed. When she went to stretch and move, she quickly realized the reason why she'd remained in bed for so long the day before. Her ankle shot a brief jolt of pain up her leg, causing her to curse under...[Read Full Post] Sat, 28 Nov 2009 14:19:06 EST http://www.Writing.Com/main/books/entry_id/677925 Mackenzie smiled as she hung up the phone. Apparently Erik and Kaylee's realtor was a woman after her own heart. The realtor was a busy woman, but had agreed to meet early with Mackenzie as long as she was willing to meet her at a Starbucks. Mackenzie laughed. Willing? Oh, yes she was. She wanted a cup of coffee, so she was more than willing. ...[Read Full Post] Sat, 28 Nov 2009 14:22:53 EST http://www.Writing.Com/main/books/entry_id/677926 Mackenzie pulled the car into the garage and just sat for a moment. Kaylee opened up the door and came into the garage. Knocking on the driver's side window, she asked, "Are you okay?" Mackenzie nodded her head and slowly began to gather up her things. Opening the car door, she settled herself and carefully got out. Her ankle was begin...[Read Full Post] Sat, 28 Nov 2009 14:32:59 EST http://www.Writing.Com/main/books/entry_id/677927 The next morning, Mackenzie woke up to a knock on her bedroom door. As she pushed herself into a sitting position, Kaylee walked in carrying a cup of coffee. "You know," Mackenzie said as she accepted the cup from Kaylee, "if you keep this up, I won't want to leave." Kaylee laughed, "Ha! Your plane ticket is set for tomorr...[Read Full Post] Sat, 28 Nov 2009 14:38:28 EST http://www.Writing.Com/main/books/entry_id/677928