Every day I will try to write here, weaving a fictional, ongoing story. For inspiration I intend to use the prompts from "The Writer's Cramp" . When I use them I'll list them at the top of the entry.

These are the comments I received for the static copy of this in "The Writer's Cramp"  from the judge and other competitors, credited to those who made them. I don't want to delete them but will be removing the static copy. Of course all of the fancy formatting has been lost.

-M


Review By: Sophy mostly offline til 2/28
Date and Time: 08-07-08 @ 12:59pm
Public/Private: Private
Reviewer's Rating: (4.5)
Review Length: 157 Characters

Thanks for entering the Cramp with you story. You followed the prompt well and ended up with a unique and entertaining story that was well written. Nice job!

Review By: theodorusrex
Date and Time: 08-07-08 @ 12:20pm
Public/Private: Private
Reviewer's Rating: (4.5)
Review Length: 619 Characters

Very interesting and creative take on the prompt here M. I was fascinated by the story and the twists that kept occuring. My only wish was that you had explained a tiny bit more about what the Rapid was. Is it a train-like transport or something?

Did you mean to say "three point seventy-five miles per hour" on purpose for the android guide? It just felt to me it could have been simpler as "three point seven-five miles per hour". That might be just me, becasue as the Guide is an andriod I thought it might speak more computer numeric.

A good and interesting read nonetheless.
Good luck with the contests
Theodorus

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