Novel Focus Forum (Forum) http://www.Writing.Com/main/forums.php/item_id/1568882-Novel-Focus-Forum Wow I didn't even think about that. Hmm. If I think of a solution, I'll let you know. Sincerely, J.D. Brown [Link: 'http://www.authorjdbrown.webs.com'] [Link: 'http://www.authorjdbrown.blogspot.com'] [Image #4000] [Link To Item #1548395] [Image #1560263] ...[Read Full Post] Sat, 17 Apr 2010 01:48:22 EDT http://www.Writing.Com/main/forums/message_id/2074909 Hi Sultry! i'll definitely let you know when we start up again. i just need more than three active members. Four would be good.. i'd also love to let people do their novels sooner than three months, but here's the problem i ran into: when we first started this, the first three members got to have their novels showcased first. But as soo...[Read Full Post] Sat, 17 Apr 2010 01:10:53 EDT http://www.Writing.Com/main/forums/message_id/2074901 Hello. I was going to join until I saw that Tamara is not continuing this at the moment. But, if it makes a difference, I would just like to commint and say I think this is a really good idea. I just finished revising my MS and am hunting around for new review groups / feedback before I send it off to agents. Oh well though. Tamara, if you ever start this up agai...[Read Full Post] Wed, 14 Apr 2010 08:21:35 EDT http://www.Writing.Com/main/forums/message_id/2073647 well, we were down to just three people, so it was pretty dead anyway! Follow my journey to publication at my blog. [Link: 'http://tamarahartheiner.blogspot.com'] Sun, 04 Apr 2010 21:12:13 EDT http://www.Writing.Com/main/forums/message_id/2069601 Oh no! I killed the group! I'm so sorry everyone! X V14 [Image #1534347] [Image #4000] Fri, 02 Apr 2010 01:27:40 EDT http://www.Writing.Com/main/forums/message_id/2068478 Hey gang, I think we're down to just me and Ms. J. We've had a good run, but we can't keep this group going with just two people. Ms. J,I'm going to leave your novel up until I finish it. When we start seeing interest from people again, we'll start it up again. Follow my journey to publication at my blog. [Link: 'http...[Read Full Post] Thu, 01 Apr 2010 07:30:04 EDT http://www.Writing.Com/main/forums/message_id/2068043 I'm so sorry everyone, but I'm going to have to leave this group. I'm just so overcommitted at the moment, and I feel so bad each time I don't find the time to finish the month's novel. It's much harder than I thought it would be when I signed up! Thank you for everything. X V14 [Image #1534347] [Image #4000] ...[Read Full Post] Wed, 31 Mar 2010 15:11:56 EDT http://www.Writing.Com/main/forums/message_id/2067755 Is everyone reading and sending copies only to her? I hope so! I know Vampyr's taking a month off...we might need to repeat this month in April. Follow my journey to publication at my blog. [Link: 'http://tamarahartheiner.blogspot.com'] Fri, 19 Mar 2010 07:08:36 EDT http://www.Writing.Com/main/forums/message_id/2062134 Chapter 14 a Oh! That queen. She just won't quit, will she? Why did Claude ever marry her? Are you doing the ABC thing with the names on purpose? I just realised, they are all A -E so far... She glanced down at her dress, assuring that it was wrinkle I assume you mean wrinkle free? Cirus and Deseja would be ...[Read Full Post] Sat, 27 Feb 2010 04:50:52 EST http://www.Writing.Com/main/forums/message_id/2051450 Chapter 13 a I'm confused about why Dejan came to the cottage. Does he know Bara was the one who cast the spell? Or does he really love Branca. I didn't get that from him. I know there was attraction, but he was so duty-bound it seemed doomed. And then, he's a binder so surely he would bind himself to the woman he's destined to ma...[Read Full Post] Sat, 27 Feb 2010 04:29:53 EST http://www.Writing.Com/main/forums/message_id/2051448 Chapter 12 a Interesting. The mirror again, but here now. Couldn't Branca use it to get home? Wouldn't she know that, since she came through it in the first place? It confused me that she wouldn't even look at it. Especially since living with Bara is intolerable. Again, look at your names. Bara and Branca are very alike, and then ...[Read Full Post] Sat, 27 Feb 2010 04:11:36 EST http://www.Writing.Com/main/forums/message_id/2051446 Chapter 11 a When you are doing done or finished eating, you may return to the manor pull her down onto the sound sand, I think you mean. A 'sound' is water, a fjord and press his mouth over hers He put the saw down. Apparently scraping wasn't important right now. ...[Read Full Post] Sat, 27 Feb 2010 03:47:11 EST http://www.Writing.Com/main/forums/message_id/2051441 Chapter 10a Oooooh! The romance begins! I knew you'd have it just around the corner. It seemed rather easy to get the ribbon off. Perhaps it was not strong magic? The conversation about the country's government, and Dejan's place in it seemed a little contrived. Yes, Branca would be interested, but having just woken from essentiall...[Read Full Post] Tue, 23 Feb 2010 04:43:44 EST http://www.Writing.Com/main/forums/message_id/2049348 Chapter 9 a She has to feed the mirror blood? When did that happen? I like it! Magic shouldn't be free. But why didn't you mention it earlier? And did Branca have to give her blood to escape through it? The ribbon is good, but I think there needs to be more of a struggle. Branca doesn't trust her half-brother, or like him much fro...[Read Full Post] Tue, 23 Feb 2010 04:26:29 EST http://www.Writing.Com/main/forums/message_id/2049346 Chapter 8 a You just have to change these kids' names! I cannot for the life of me get them straight. And I can't quite remember how old the elder two are. 14 and 12? And going to war? They seem younger too, but maybe that's because they've lived alone for so long in the forest. I like that Ansis couldn't kill the boy thoug...[Read Full Post] Tue, 23 Feb 2010 03:57:49 EST http://www.Writing.Com/main/forums/message_id/2049343 Sorry, I read fast, and I've got a mountain load of papers coming in this next week. I wanted to make sure I finished it. I did think of one thing though, what happened to the boys? I know that you will be able to get this book in wonderful shape. It's not as bad as you think. I still enjoyed it very much. Not ...[Read Full Post] Sun, 21 Feb 2010 17:10:27 EST http://www.Writing.Com/main/forums/message_id/2048367 sometimes we all need a break! take care! Follow my journey to publication at my blog. [Link: 'http://tamarahartheiner.blogspot.com'] Sun, 21 Feb 2010 14:12:57 EST http://www.Writing.Com/main/forums/message_id/2048295 thanks for the feedback! I was like, oh no, when I saw that you'd finished. yikes! this book has a lot of potential. but there's just some things wrong. I was hoping to have a more finished draft for the focus forum, but oh well! your feedback will be very helpful! Follow my journey to publication at my blog. [Link: 'http://tamaraharthe...[Read Full Post] Sun, 21 Feb 2010 14:11:58 EST http://www.Writing.Com/main/forums/message_id/2048294 for our new sig! Isn't it awesome? Follow my journey to publication at my blog. [Link: 'http://tamarahartheiner.blogspot.com'] Sun, 21 Feb 2010 14:10:46 EST http://www.Writing.Com/main/forums/message_id/2048291 Epilogue Mid 21st Century Irenal Heavy panting and occasional grunts echoed off the soft yellow walls in the castle infirmary. The computer monitor emitted a constant series of beeps. A nurse hovered close to Queen Branca, and the king stood next to her, his face white and lined. The queen threw back her head and moaned. The king grasped h...[Read Full Post] Sun, 21 Feb 2010 11:40:49 EST http://www.Writing.Com/main/forums/message_id/2048233 XIX. Arrive in Irenal From outside the castle, it didn't look like anyone had been here. comma But there was still no sign of Ginger. Lorena, petty fool, had ordered a search party. Cinthia was already on the hunt. She wondered who'd find her first. # Something cold and wet touc...[Read Full Post] Sun, 21 Feb 2010 11:28:12 EST http://www.Writing.Com/main/forums/message_id/2048223 XVII. Crashing Branca started to go after Ginger, shaking from emotion, but Dejan grabbed her upper arms. He looked at it too, and nodded. "Ah.{c;blue} comma She came through the mirror. So then we have a way of getting to Irenal?" "My father's not dying yet. We have time to help Irenal. Maybe we can find a way...[Read Full Post] Sun, 21 Feb 2010 10:49:33 EST http://www.Writing.Com/main/forums/message_id/2048210 Hey everyone, Just letting you know I'm going to take the month of March off from reviewing. I'm going to do the NoWriMo thing and with work and kids, I don't think I have the time for everything. So I'll be back in April, hopefully with a brand new novel for you all to work on with me! X V14 [Image #1534347] [Image #4000] ...[Read Full Post] Sat, 20 Feb 2010 20:13:54 EST http://www.Writing.Com/main/forums/message_id/2047916 Just a couple of things about chapter 16 that I thought of after I sent the review... Ok, you hinted that the guest might react to Branca's changed appearance, but you didn't say anything about their reaction. Also, after reading I couldn't remember, do all nobles have the power to heal? I thought Branca's power ...[Read Full Post] Sat, 20 Feb 2010 19:19:46 EST http://www.Writing.Com/main/forums/message_id/2047894 The right and left wing were symmetrical plural, so "wings" would be apropos. Question: the Queen says Branca's meeting with the Ambassador was twenty minutes earlier, and she had gone in Branca's place, yet she's already there to speak to Branca? Seems to me a meeting could not have been accomplished that s...[Read Full Post] Sat, 20 Feb 2010 13:54:42 EST http://www.Writing.Com/main/forums/message_id/2047769