: CrimsonStylus
: Twins of Yellow     (Rated: 13+)
: 04-06-12 @ 5:46am
: A simple tragic story. This is an attempt at making an adaptation. Please tell me what you think.

: Summer Wind is Fighting Cancer
: Welcome To Greenville     (Rated: 18+)
: 03-05-12 @ 6:13pm
: I like this story, how can I improve it. I entered it in a horror contest, and was trying to show the psychological affect of horror, so any help would be appreciated on what is missing. I have been writing for 7 months.

: Oddt427
: Jacquelline Jilles Part I     (Rated: E)
: 02-15-12 @ 5:23pm
: This is the story of a wealthy land-owner in a future where cloning has become a part of civilization, and humanity has reached the stars. I'd love it if anyone could provide some critiquing of the style, especially in regards to pacing.

: jasmine
: Memories of 13     (Rated: E)
: 02-15-12 @ 3:26pm
: Written for 'Eat My Valentine' contest. It describes a horrible Valentine's Day experience.Any helpful advice on how I can improve my writing will be greatly appreciated. :)

: embryo
: Marion's delight     (Rated: 13+)
: 02-15-12 @ 1:45pm
: Here's my review request, you lovely people. It's a short story about a May - December love. Word count: 2676 Cheers!

: I was made with wings
: Kip     (Rated: 13+)
: 02-15-12 @ 1:13am
: I am considering a series of shorts stories related to the characters in this one. I would like to know if there is any potential for this and some advice and feedback on this particular story as well. Thanks for your time and advice!

: richman3
: Toot!     (Rated: E)
: 02-14-12 @ 6:03pm
: This is my first writing project since high school so be gentle. It is a simple story about a mother and her son. Thank you for taking the time to read this. Any feedback would be appreicated. Good or Bad.

: Smudger
: In memory of ....     (Rated: 13+)
: 02-14-12 @ 1:03pm
: Written for a short story competition, any subject, with a 750 word limit. A challenge for me as I am usually 'wordy'. It is loosely based on the life, and subsequent early death, of a good friend.It is my first attempt at writing in the first person.

: Kath unsworth
: Kookazoo     (Rated: E)
: 02-14-12 @ 2:48am
: Imagine a bunch of kids running a zoo, when they have no real animals. Please honest opinion on this chapter, does it create enough interest to read on?

: CrimsonStylus
: Writing Short #3     (Rated: 13+)
: 02-13-12 @ 7:56am
: I'm kinda having trouble with making a good format and with tenses. I would gladly appreciate if you take your time to review this as I need a serious critique in one of my works. Comments on the story's plot is much appreciated as well.

: Milo
: To Challenge an Emperor     (Rated: ASR)
: 02-13-12 @ 5:32am
: I love writing fantasy but the hardest part can be creating a believable world that readers can immediately believe and become immersed in. I'm wondering if I've done that successfully. Thanks! Always looking to improve!

: Avec
: From Spring to Summer     (Rated: GC)
: 02-11-12 @ 1:33am
: I originally wrote the internal dialogue with italics... This is a short story; however, critic of this will assist me with a larger piece of work. I think usually, I use the words he, she, and the character names too much.

: Avec
: Finding, Losing, Finding     (Rated: E)
: 02-11-12 @ 1:22am
: This is an excerpt from a book I am working on:" Finding, Losing, Finding." I am wondering if the tense sounds consistent or if it reads like a book would. I am wondering if my sentences should be more descriptive.

: Kasia ~ ID#1868420
: What Couldn't Be Said     (Rated: 13+)
: 02-10-12 @ 9:16pm
: I'm not very good with short stories, never have been. But I hope to change that and I've given it a go, but it's hard. Would love a review of this piece because, although I wrote it a while ago, I'm not altogether satisfied.

: Paigeturner
: The Snow Storm     (Rated: E)
: 08-18-11 @ 8:56pm
: Perhaps the first chapter of a longer story. However, the referenced item centers on a call boy, Tommy Delute, who is working for the Great Northern Railroad in Wellington, Wa, during the winter of 1910.

: Red Nev
: Sycophanticism     (Rated: 18+)
: 07-30-11 @ 9:06am
: The formatting and paragraphs are quite messy. Kindly bear with me. Thank you.

: Hope
: Faery: A Tale of Dreams - Prologue     (Rated: 13+)
: 07-03-11 @ 6:51am
: Not all faeries are pixies dressed in bluebells. Sometimes they're out for blood. In this case, Bambi's blood - and her dreams. If you'd like to review the other chapters I have posted, that'd be great, but I'm only specifically requesting the prologue:)

: J.W. Knight
: Elizabeth's Portrait (Part 4)     (Rated: E)
: 06-01-11 @ 11:40pm
: The next chapter of Elizabeth's story. This is done in third person perspective. Completely different than the otehr 3 chapters, since everything except her diary entries are in present day. Diary entries will still be done in first person, Elizabeth.

: J. Anya Christos
: Waiting Room For The Not Quite Dead     (Rated: 18+)
: 09-23-10 @ 9:04pm
: This is a story about how close we unknowingly court death in our mundane lives. Please comment on the POV. It switches from first person to third person omniscient. I was not sure if you put quotes around a person's thoughts. Is it boring? Where?

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