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 Review #3669196 |
 1829746 | Plot Outline  [E] Outline for a novel I hope to write (first draft) by Bertiebrite was given Light  |
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 WHY I'M REVIEWING FOR YOU  Group/purpose: I am reviewing your work as a student of the Rockin' Review Academy! Title: Plot Outline Many times I find treasure and interesting odds and ends when I investigate the beginning of content a writer is considering developing into word art. I found treasure and am glad you have shared it with me! Description: Outline for a novel I hope to write (first draft) I successfully completed the NaNoWriMo challenge for 2011, so having had this experience, I decided that looking into your ideas and creativity for starting your novel would be helpful to both of us.  Picture Eventually, I hope.  PORTFOLIO VISIT Visiting with you has been fun and enjoyable. Allowing me to explore all of the myriad writings you have created has allowed me to know the plethora of treasure you have awaiting the avid reader, writer, and reviewer.  I LIKE The challenge of starting to write something new and also the challenge of helping someone write something new is well worth spending time with the writer and their writing. I like the way you have organized the information for the first draft of your novel. It is easy to find information listed under categories so that when you need to refer to this information or add to what was started it is ready and waiting for your attention. What and why: After reading your out line for this novel, I have a good idea about a lot of what will happen. However, have you considered, climate; storms, temperature, the atmosphere, season, and other weather and climate possibilities, planet characteristics; soil, water, housing materials, geography, and how the planet will look and evolve, people;looks/characteristics; speech patterns; clothes or not; food; and other necessities,transportation;; vehicles; public conveyances; other unique and unusual possibilities, and possibly how the way of life between these peoples may or may not turn their differences into either friendship or being mortal enemies? plot: You have a very good idea with a huge amount of potential. For me this seems to be the very beginning of a novel which could be created with many different possibilities, activities, scenes, locations, characters, and much, much more. Theme:underlying meaning/message I can see the possibilities for several meanings and messages which can be woven into this story. One of the most powerful messages could be-if you are careful, work hard and use the tools you have diligently and with wisdom, you have an opportunity to over come adversity. Mans inhumanity to many can be the downfall of a people and a nation. One well used statement is, "don't judge a book by it's cover." I think just because Stephen has been taught, thinks, or perhaps only has part of a picture about a culture; He shouldn't judge until he has an opportunity to investigate thoroughly the people being studied. Rhythm/pace: a NICE MIX OF RHYTHM SHOULD KEEP THIS NOVEL INTERESTING TO THE READER. i WOULD WEAVE INTO THE RHYTHM BITS AND PIECES OF MYSTERY, PERHAPS SOME DULL BUT NECESSARY INFORMATION, SOME SCENIC AND CHARACTER BUILDING EVENTS WHICH WOULD SHOW THE CULTURE OF BOTH COMMUNITIES INVOLVED IN THIS CHALLENGING MEETING BETWEEN THE SCIENTISTS AND UNKNOWN POPULATION THEY ARE INVADING. Oops, accidentally hit the caps lock. Truthfully, I'm getting tired.  OBSERVATION(S) Writer's Purpose I would like to know what happens to everyone and how this story is created and presented. Conflict:more/less A nice mix of conflict of different origins, between different people, and resulting in interesting out comes which can be tied together would most likely add a lot of spice and interest to this story. CHARACTERS You are developing some very interesting characters. Are you going to explore their outer selves as well as their inner selves? I am a detail person, so I vote for details about what they look like, how they act; dress; speak; think; like and dislike; and other things which could help make their life styles believable and as if the reader was inside the characters:like being the character. Believability I can believe this story. Truth is stranger than fiction is something someone said and putting truth into your fiction should make your novel like watching a movie.  QUESTION(S) Have you decided: the time span for your novel? the time as in what year(s) this take place? Is Stephen going to accomplish his goals? Why or why not? What is going to happen in the beginning chapter and at the end of the book? How many major and minor characters are going to be in this story? I usually start to get lost if there are more than three or at most four main characters. This is more because of me than because of the writer and the way the writer wrote the content.  SUGGESTIONS AND COMMENTS: I would recommend working on the out line, then giving yourself some time away from this content so that you can look at it again from a fresh prospective. My thoughts and ideas which may be of interest to you: Don't give up on this book. There are many different ways to present this story, the characters, the scenes, and the intent of what you want to impart to the reader.  CONCLUSION(S) This is a treasure which right now is a work in progress. I hope you will find the time and tools you need to write this novel. Perhaps you could enter the NaNoWriMo and writ the first draft of this novel. My thoughts and Impressions: Slowly I'm starting to become interested in sci-fi. I hope to be able to read your novel. Thank you for writing the outline for your novel. I enjoyed learning about your writing project and hope it goes smoothly for you. Write with all of your might and you will delight many readers. I'm glad to have the privilege of reading your work and reviewing for you, thank you.:)  
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You responded to this review 03/03/2012 @ 9:45am EST