Review of showering acts of joy
Part of the SAJ garden;
Overall impression of piece: Not the brightest most upbeat thing on WDC. I get this feeling. Its like being in a car and not going anywhere until you have some idea what might be the best way. Yes, life can be spinning your wheels
Grammatical and spelling errors:Seems ok
What I liked?
You take us step by miry step into the pit. I sense and feel every step of this progression. I see myself immersed in darkness might be a final line. I think you can have darkness and still be ok. Nobody liives in perfect light. I think when you live in light, it is a supernatural occurance. It is not natural
What I disliked. Something to think about.
: The world has no hope. I am not sure if anyone wants to hear that, even if its true. Even coping with darkness and God has left the planet gives something and I think we need that. I think this sounds like a prelude to suicide as a title. I think death can come before death. I think it happens often
How the piece made me feel: I read how you make sense of things. I can't really feel where you are going with this. it does make me question choices in my life and why or why the don't ,work. This has kind of a TS elliot feel to it. It defined a generation. I am not sure what came out of that.
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