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 Review #3685848 |
  |  [E] (April 2011, Rising Stars Contest Winner) A deeply personal tale of a true love lost..  |
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| (4.5)| I Will Be Reviewing This Piece today on behalf of "Showering Acts of Joy Group " by Pat ~Loving Spring Forward!  ! ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** Midnitewhisper here, Please know that my reviews are my personal opinions only. Please take what you wish from this review and disregard anything else knowing I will not be offended.   First Impression: As i went through your port looking for something to enjoy, i came upon this piece and the title and description caught my attention and drew me into wanting to read it. After reading it, I feel there is no other way you could have titled this piece than what you did. It fits perfectly with your story. As well, so does the description. They both catch a readers eye and draws them in. Your story is so sad indeed. The sufferings in this piece are clear, the emotions raw and so very vivid. It's a story many who have lost a love can relate to. The emotional toll it takes on the survivors to have to go on day after day without their true love in life. Your story brings out empathy and sympathy for the characters. Your story reads like a poem, beautiful. There's a slow pace to it that draws on a readers emotions. It leaves me breathless, speechless at times. I feel sorrow and heartache but I also understand the love you have for Suzy and how much she really means to you. Suggestions: but to tell you the truth I was too busy praying to God to send me an angel that I never noticed her. - This line is a good one, nothing really wrong with it, but I do have a suggestion that might make it an even better line. 'but to tell you the truth, I was too busy praying to God to send me an angel that I never noticed He already had'. It's just a little change but does it not make a bigger impact?Overall Impression: It would be cruel to say I enjoyed this story, but I feel I can say in honesty that I enjoyed how this piece was written. It's a calming read although a sad situation/subject. All emotions are understood, brought forth vividly through descriptive words. It draws sympathy, sadness, and other emotions from a reader to feel for the characters. Well written, beautiful expressions of emotions. Thank you for sharing this piece though I know how hard it must have been to write it. as always, please do... Write On!Best wishes, midnitewhisper ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** Know someone who needs a smile or some encouragement? Send them a shower from "Showering Acts of Joy Group " by Pat ~Loving Spring Forward! !
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You responded to this review 03/27/2012 @ 2:19pm EDT