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This is a Writers Garden Review!

Please remember that these are just my thoughts and somebody else might see it differently!

Initial hook: I'm here with a Tea Garden review! I found myself wandering in this folder and I think it intrigued me because you said you have been trying new techniques etc. I wanted to have a read and see what it was all about!

Storyline: This was a really creepy story! It works well as it's told from the point of view of the stalker. I think that makes it really unique and when the story starts we at first think he's just a man (though I did question if they were in a relationship because of the way you said it) but soon came to realise he was obsessed with her.

You wrote:

'He bent at the waist which brought him eye level to Hannah, a woman he wanted to spend the rest of his life with.'

I think when I read this I assumed they were in a relationship. Obviously you quickly established this wasn't the case I just thought I'd let you know.

Characters: The main character in this is Charles. We see everything from his point of view. It makes it all seem so harmless and fun. I think you've really captured his personality and it makes me scared to think that there are people out there who are actually like this!

We then meet Hannah. She seems to be quite small and innocent at first, weak almost. She's willing to hold her ground but then things become over the top and overwhelming. When we saw her in his grasp I thought she was going to be the damsel in distress but instead, she was the femme fatale, quiet and dangerous. It worked really well and gave a brilliant twist to the story.



I don't have any suggestions to make!



Hope this helped!



But well done on a good write!!

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