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Review #3708279
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by A Guest Visitor
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Review of Kitten  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi, Lil' Sticky !

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by Gabriella


I really enjoyed your poem, "Invalid Item" !

Now! For your review!!!

Title/Theme
I was interested to see how you described a kitten, kittens in general, or some various aspects of kittens, based on the title you chose for this piece. The theme of the poem is about what cats do and how they act and is very strong throughout the poem.

Imagery
You use your action words and phrases in this cinquain very well to describe the cat and its actions clearly so that the reader can envision them personally.

Rhythm/Flow
This cinquain flows very well from beginning to end, which can sometimes be hard to do in a poem that has such varying line lengths. Great job!

Rhyme
There is no intentional rhyming in this piece other than the repeating use of 'ing' in the third and fourth lines.

Structure
You follow the rules of the cinquain form very well in this piece. My only suggestion about form is that you offer up an Author's Note or something similar that describes the rules of the form for readers who may not understand why you wrote this the way you did.

Diction
You choose words in this piece that are strong and contain a lot of visual cues for the reader. Great job with word choice!

Grammar
I found no grammatical errors in this piece. Well done!

Most Liked
Kneading, scratching, playing
Eating, tail chasing, napping long,


I love these two lines because I can really picture the cat and what it's doing.

Personal Thoughts
This is a very well written short poem that packs a really powerful descriptive punch for such a small piece. I think you did very good job with word choice especially. Write On!

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