So I did end up finishing the story about Savanna before the end of February. Here is the final product:
I really like how it turned out and I want to expand it to enter in the "Oceanic Vista of Words" Competition for Teen Ink I mentioned last post. I was thinking I would just add to this story and upload it as a separate static item. I started to write a little more (please read the static above before you read the continued bit I am copying below. I don't want you to be confused! )
The cacophony of canons all going off at the same time was deafening, but Cruz relished in the sounds of battle. She would never back down, never surrender in a fight, and she didn't plan on committing anything less than murder in this one.
The King's men began to board her vessel. The stiff suited soldiers swung like wingless gulls across the choppy water between the hulls. One of them crashed his heeled boots onto her deck with the grace of a beached whale and teetered for a second trying to regain his balance. Quick as a dolphin in the wake of her mighty ship, Cruz blasted the soldier between his eyes with her double barreled pistol and seized the rope from his lifeless hands. A running leap sent Cruz sailing across the gap between the hulls.
She relished in the brisk air whipping her face and knew there could be no ending to this endeavor besides triumph. Or she would die trying.
Why hadn't the Mage cast any spells yet? He must be waiting for the perfect moment to strike is all, Cruz told herself. She would make sure he never got that chance.
The new Detailed Writing Prompt is up for March though the winner from February hasn't been announced yet. Here is the prompt. I think I may try to write something for this one too:
March's Detailed Writing Prompt is all about discovering things: things, places, events and characters. The process of discovery should begin with discovering (or defining) the characters of the story. The characters are what tie a story together. Characters have a relationship with each other, with the places they inhabit, the things that surround them, and the events they experience.
Last month was a story structure prompt, this month is a story elements prompt. Two brothers rescue another fellow in battle. They say they are fleeing a land as one of the brothers was accused of a crime he didn't commit. The rescued fellow feels he has to pay his debt to the brothers before returning to his own home. Only thing is, the accused brother isn't innocent.
SOME SETTINGS TO PONDER:
FANTASY. The dictionary defines fantasy as “fancy, mental image; caprice; hallucination”. Fantasy always includes events that are unlikely, if not impossible, in real life. It usually contains unrealistic settings, characters and events. Fantasy is a broad term that can encompass a range of different categories including fairy tales, myths, fables, science fiction, and others.
HISTORICAL A story of two brothers in a strange land need not be a fantasy setting. The prompt can easily apply to an historical setting. The setting could easily be a western, a civil war story, or one set in the french revolution.
MILITARY Whether set in lands alien, fantastical, or closer to home, a military setting lends itself well to this prompt. Soldiers returning home or Soldiers returning to battle, the fates of men often play out on a battlefield.
I've been told I should do a "What I'm Reading Now" section of this blog. So.... Here we go!
What I'm Reading Now!:
IRL (In real life) I am reading Tick Tock , and am trying to finish it this weekend (that shouldn't be too hard; it is really good) so I can start Stephen King's 11/22/63 which also looks wonderful. Everyone I have asked about it have said it is great. I haven't read much of King's books because I'm not really that into horror, but this new book of his is actually a time travel/historical book. I'm excited!
The book I'm getting into that is from a member on this site is "Broken Faith: The Awakening" . I told him I'd give his book a little plug so here I go! It is set in a futuristic world and we follow the main character, Pedro as he embarks on a journey spurred from the start by the loss of a job but soon becomes something so much more. I'm on chapter four right now and need to write a review for it. His chapters have inspired me to write some of my best reviews. For my review of his chapter three, I wrote the longest review I have ever done! (Review of "Broken Faith: The Awakening" ) Granted, I did talk about adverbs for an obscenely long time, but still.
A long time ago, a friend of mine of this site, Kurt (aka Emailman ) showed me this list he compiled of ways to show rather than tell. I think I may share it with MrMidnight:
I already shared this with him, but now I want to share it with you as well!:
|ID: 1420330 (Rated: E)|
A brief tutorial and personal rant on passive voice
I was listening to some more old songs and came abroad some intriguing lyrics. The first is from MIKA's song, "Relax, Take it Easy":
Took a ride to the end of the line
Where no one ever goes.
Ended up on a broken train with nobody I know.
I always thought it said: "Took a ride to the end of the nightmare..." or "Took a ride to the end of the night Where no one..." Though the lyrics are still cool, I thought they would have been cooler with one of my versions... Oh well.
The next comes from Billy Joel's song, "The River of Dreams." I always thought this was a song full of metaphors and symbols and this lyric (along with the rest of the song) definitely proves it:
I know I'm searching for something
Something so undefined
That it can only be seen
By the eyes of the blind
In closing, here are the things/people I want to review next:
"Saphire" : Though this user hasn't been online for nearly a year.
"Invalid Item" : Detective Monroe stuff
Alisea Ovrebo : I still have not properly thanked her for her kind review. I actually wrote another chapter of Agent 38 on the high her review gave me.
On that high note, thanks for reading if you have gotten this far!