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Subject: I have finally finished...
Date: 15:17:03 12/22/2005
From: obwan (8)
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Ah Sachem,

It is almost with regret that I came finally to the end of your book. Reading it was
almost like taking the journey with the three, and the four, who are as one, and I feel
almost lost having finished reading it.

While I still have many issues with some of the grammar, you have done an astounding job
of presenting a very difficult topic. The humor does an incredible job job of making it
readable, and it's so much better than the YELLING you started out with. You really have
a wonderful sytle of writing.

I know that Whynot is real, but does it yet have a physical reality?

Truely a gem, sir. My hat is off to you for this fine effort - both in conception and in
execution.

Robert

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Subject: Comment For SCHIZOPHRENIC RESCUE ( complete on blog) (#1047838)
Date: 17:14:33 01/07/2006
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From: auntwheezie (1)


This was with out a doubt one of the most interesting pieces of fiction I have ever had the pleasure of reading. The play on words, the conversations and the overall content are very different.The whole premise of Me, Myself and I being 3 individual characters that are still so intertwined was inspirational. I had a good chuckle through most of it and I thoroughly enjoyed what didn't make me laugh. You might want to separate the dialogue lines into separate para's to give the readers a bit of a break but other than that I really did have a good time reading it.

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Subject: Comment For "SCHIZOPHRENIC RESCUE" Part I (#1040519)
Date: 04:12:26 12/20/2005
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Dear K. I.
Thought your story was very good and it held my
interest until the end. I would like to see this
become a movie. Have you thought about doing a screen play? I very much like'd your characters. I's and myself I just love. Your view on the overweight population of the US is so very true. I think they should ban all fast food places or ban overweight adults and children from entering. Thank you for
sharing very, very good.
M Duci
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Subject: Comment For "SCHIZOPHRENIC RESCUE" Part I (#1040519)
Date: 20:52:49 12/19/2005
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Highly enteresting, it surely grabbed my interest. I may be crazy, but I actually sat here the entire time reading this without taking a break and barely blinking and finially realized how much I have read. My eyes are a little weird now, but all is well for it was definately a worthwhile read. I look forward to the next parts. Perhaps a new fan of your work -Josh
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Subject: Comment For "SCHIZOPHRENIC RESCUE" Part I (#1040519)
Date: 17:35:18 12/19/2005
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From: J.S. Cload~Happy Holidays! (2)


::claps:: Good! ^^ Though there were a fer mistakes. But I liked your little piece. So are there going to be other ones? Or are you just going to leave it be? Maybe you should continue..Oh well its your choice, anyways I thought that because of the Part 1 part..but write on and stay warm!
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Subject: Comment For "SCHIZOPHRENIC RESCUE" Part I (#1040519)
Date: 11:39:24 12/19/2005
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This is awesome! I love the way you emphasize your writing! And what a great plot I could go on and on talking about your awesome plot! You have an awesome imagination.

I also noticed you used very characterized words, an thats something a reader looks for.

Of how long this story was and the plot I couldn't find not one mistake!

Happy holidays keep up the awesome writing and keep using characterized words. If you like please visit my port to rate and revie a few things enjoy!

p.s. Happy writing, blue means good, red means bad, green means other!




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Subject: Comment For "SCHIZOPHRENIC RESCUE" Part I (#1040519)
Date: 03:40:59 12/19/2005
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dear writer,

Great story man!!! it was totally flawless and had an awesome storyline. I am sireous you should think about submitting this to a publishing company. This should be required reading for all grade levles. I relly hope to see this in bookstores very soon.
nuroticly yours, angel_fanatic:)
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Subject: Comment For "SCHIZOPHRENIC RESCUE" Part I (#1040519)
Date: 08:55:01 12/18/2005
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Hi,
I think this is an excellent work. Some of the lines in here made me wish I could write like that. You can take even a simple thing like falling asleep and write it in words full of poetry. You are really creative. The imagery is awesome. Great job!
Keep writing!
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Subject: Comment For "SCHIZOPHRENIC RESCUE" Part I (#1040519)
Date: 00:54:05 12/18/2005
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Absolutely riveting. This was amazing and I have absolutely no criticism as I felt this was great they way it is. Wonderful writing style. I look forward to reading more of your work and as the title of this states that this is part 1, I will look forward to a part 2.

Great job,
-Lee
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Subject: Comment For "SCHIZOPHRENIC RESCUE" Part I (#1040519)
Date: 17:11:57 12/16/2005
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Wow this story is looking great so far. I can see that you worked really hard on this and this is just one entry imgine in the next week or so this could be the best book on wrting.com I hope you really keep up the good work. Remember that good work gets rewarded.

Write on
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Subject: Comment For "SCHIZOPHRENIC RESCUE" Part I (#1040519)
Date: 11:03:54 12/16/2005
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This was a very interesting book. You did great describing everything and you really opened up a new world inside my imagination. Is part II out yet? I would love to read it. Anyway, great job and continue writing! You're really good

Sincerely,
braden
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Subject: Comment For "SCHIZOPHRENIC RESCUE" Part I (#1040519)
Date: 11:03:09 12/16/2005
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Wow, this is an interesting piece. the writing is done well and the grammar and spelling seem good. keep on writing and keep the talent alive! once agian, great job.


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Subject: Comment For "SCHIZOPHRENIC RESCUE" Part I (#1040519)
Date: 10:29:42 12/16/2005
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Since this item has been posted ostensibly in blog format, I would assume it is an ‘inside’ and therefore informed view of the perceptions of life made by someone with multiple personality disorder, whether written by a sufferer or a medic/carer I could not begin to guess.

The deeply personal content means that the line of the piece is difficult to follow, though the writing itself is quite beautiful – even lyrical - and is rich in both imagery and literary allusions.

I cannot truthfully say thatI enjoyed reading it; it was too disturbing a piece for that. But it is certainly both a mesmerizing and stimulating read.
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The trinity of me, myself and I is appropriate in discussing the concept of our apparent entrapment. The words that first come to mind are "a nation that would give up its freedom for its security deserves neither." but to give up its freedom for the smoke and mirrors of manifest destiny seems such a waste. It is always difficult to find the correct balance when carrying responsibility especially when you are being distracted by something intent on disturbing your equilibrium.
Insightful, sometimes funny, a bit paranoid, more that a little schizophrenic, so true it almost hurts though disguised enough that it might just get through the door.
Subject: Comment For "SCHIZOPHRENIC RESCUE" Part I (#1040519)
Date: 22:51:08 12/15/2005
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First Of All, It was great! I usually only read short, poem-like entrances, but this was great. Have you published it yet? You should

-Kyoto_San-
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Subject: Comment For "SCHIZOPHRENIC RESCUE" Part I (#1040519)
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Perfect in the sense of what I had read. Because it is such a long story I will save it and print it off to finish the read. I am curious on how this turns out for it is the best philosophical writing with all the nuances of shakespeare and a twist of cliches. Well done.

matlock
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Subject: Comment For "SCHIZOPHRENIC RESCUE" Part I (#1040519)
Date: 20:09:33 12/15/2005
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Enlightening if a little frightening. Entertaining though a little draining as one jumps back and forth across the border line.
Cholmsky wrote' "they are control freaks who are at best hypocrites and at worst criminals whose arrogance is exceeded only by their mendacity". He was talking about his government but I think any government or religion is included. The fear of death almost as great as the fear of poverty lets us let them do it.
To change the world for the better seems at first glance a noble endeavour and if someone were to suggest they could plant the seeds of such global change I would suggest taking a couple aspirin, sleeping on it and then calling me in the morning.
As to slavery, they have made slaves of themselves and are now always busy converting their time their very lives into money. The process is not a pleasant one and does not lend itself to discovering its nature, or the nature of money. The true nature of money is a full spectrum discussion.
At the end "The hitchhikers guide to the Galaxy comes to mind"
Don't Panic. You'll think of Something.
keep thinking.
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Subject: Comment For "SCHIZOPHRENIC RESCUE" Part I (#1040519)
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Good !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Subject: Comment For "SCHIZOPHRENIC RESCUE" Part I (#1040519)
Date: 17:01:45 12/15/2005
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Wow. This was really long. The formatting at the beginning with the short and double spaced lines was a little distracting and I almost didn't want to read this because of that. It was just a little much to have all in one item. Maybe try breaking it down into shorter sections so the reader can read it in incraments and give better more detailed critiques.

:) As a whole, I really enjoyed this. Besides the formatting problems I had with it, I thought it was extremely interesting. Great job!
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Subject: Comment For "SCHIZOPHRENIC RESCUE" Part I (#1040519)
Date: 11:10:49 12/15/2005
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Your story was facsinating.
I liked the details that you put into it.
I can tell you worked extra hard on this piece of extraordinary writing.
It took me almost an hour to read the first half and I still have to read the second half.
Keep up the good work.

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Subject: Comment For "SCHIZOPHRENIC RESCUE" Part I (#1040519)
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There is just room in here
for me, myself and I,
and while two is company
three is certainly a crowd
but when the three get together
they are always much too loud.

I ask them what would you do if it happened to you and tell them that I stood there once for what seemed forever and yet standing here now it seems like never. It makes me think that the chemical factory in my mind is running a late shift without a supervisor. I have stood, as a part of me is still standing at the entrance to the labyrinth beside the fires, surrounded by the darkness, amidst the echoes of voices. You stand in helpless awe not even knowing enough to wish you were on the other side of the looking glass. For while you are in the dream you are subject to the law of relativity and anything makes sense even nonsense.
My hourglass has run out of sand and other things now call for my attention. I will be back but do not look for me, that's another story.
Good luck with the status quo.
Keep Flowing.
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Subject: Comment For "SCHIZOPHRENIC RESCUE" Part I (#1040519)
Date: 14:48:27 12/14/2005
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What a wonderfully great idea! To use me, myself, and I like that! Half the time I had to reread what I was reading to make sure I had it right in my head. I enjoyed the intellectual conversations of your characters immensely. Your whole story gives much food for thought. I will have to read it again to see if my perceptions about the story alter upon the second reading.
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Subject: Comment For "SCHIZOPHRENIC RESCUE" Part I (#1040519)
Date: 12:56:43 12/14/2005
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A very interesting concept, using Me, Myself and I as individual characters instead of as one entity.

At first I found it difficult to read it that way, but after a paragraph or two, I was able to identify them as characters.

Question: Why are the first eleven chapters in such a strange format? The narrow column double spaced is strange to look at.

Keep writing!
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Subject: Comment For "SCHIZOPHRENIC RESCUE" Part I (#1040519)
Date: 12:33:19 12/14/2005
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Wow! Good peices you got going on here! Do you have them posted on here at all? I think that you should put them on here. I really liked this blog. It doesn't give too too much about your life, but that's ok. I hope to see more of your work someday!

__________________________________

Warm Regards, considering it's cold anyway!

Fantasyman288
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Subject: Comment For "SCHIZOPHRENIC RESCUE" Part I (#1040519)
Date: 11:41:05 12/14/2005
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Overall impressions: Hello I really enjoyed reading this.

Things I liked: I liked the fact that it was light-hearted, and had sort of a funny touch to it. It was rather amusing. I hope that was your intension in this.

Things I think should be cut: None of it. I thought that you did a wonderful job on this.

Things that need rewording: None. You did a wonderful job with the word flow in this.

Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation suggestions: I couldn't see any grammatical errors. Good Job!

Plot comments: Interesting is the word to describe this area I enjoyed it.

Things I found confusing/questions: None.

Character comments: I liked how you referred the characters in that as 'Me', 'Myself', and 'I' in this story.

Visualization comments: I could picture this story in its entirity. Good job.

Title/Name comments: I thought the title that you picked out was very good.

I enjoyed reading this. Great job! Keep writing. Take care.

Nikki




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Subject: Comment For "SCHIZOPHRENIC RESCUE" Part I (#1040519)
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A particularly well-written tale, and one that will probably benefit from a second reading. The layout was a bit confusing, as it started off looking like a free verse poem, which I actually really liked, then moved into big close-together paragraphs. Was this deliberate?

Just a small suggestion: to make sure all style points are consistent through the piece. For example, the following line lifted from the beginning:

Good morning greeted Me, and Myself, to which I

replied, “What’s up?” .

The speech marks are used for "I " but not "Me".
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Wow! I am very impressed that you came up with this. When I first started to read this, it took a little while for me to get into the story but once i did, I couldn't stop reading. This is a very interesting concept and you've filled the story with bits of history and advice.
All in all, a very good story that leaves the reader thinking.
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Subject: Comment For "SCHIZOPHRENIC RESCUE" Part I (#1040519)
Date: 21:24:03 12/13/2005
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Well Done! I know this isn't the complete story, but so far I liked what I read. The introduction really pulled me in. This sounds like a book I would purchase at Barnes and Noble if I saw it. I would really like to read the whole thing when you are done with it.
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Subject: Comment For "SCHIZOPHRENIC RESCUE" Part I (#1040519)
Date: 21:09:53 12/13/2005
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Suggestions
This piece has a good premise, however, the formatting is a bit off. Perhaps you should be more consistent with the way you type things, such as chapter one isn't word wrapped, and later chapters are.

You may also want to include the writingML tag to indent at the beginning of new paragraphs.



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Subject: Comment For "SCHIZOPHRENIC RESCUE" Part I (#1040519)
Date: 19:13:50 12/13/2005
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Wow! And again I say WOW! This story is spectacular! I can't wait to read more. It took me awhile to read it all, but I got through it, somehow. There were alot of fancy words. I'm not but a simple 9th grader.LOL. One error I did find-''When are we leaving?''they queried?-They should be capitalized. And I don't think it should have a question mark at the end. Other than that, I didn't spot any mistakes. So again I say, great job!-Lovablechick
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Subject: Comment For "SCHIZOPHRENIC RESCUE" Part I (#1040519)
Date: 19:10:59 12/13/2005
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I think this is an excellent collection. It is very well developed and based on some pretty good subjects and ideas. Now, the thing that stood out to me was your sentence structure and variety. Many aspiring writers will begin all their sentences with the same word, but I saw none of that. This also demonstrates a sophisticated vocabulary development. Well, anyway, nice job!
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Date: 23:54:10 11/11/2005
From: Khalish (47)

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From: Khalish (47)


There are many truly unique things about this novel.

1. It is an item that has awarded the highest auto-award points so far, 7500.

2. That high offer is not the self-congratulating dream of a megalomaniac. The magnaminity of the gift coincides with that of the work.

3. It is not for small hearts/brains. It is a scholarly work with definite ideology and purpose and is highly symbolic. Anyone who misses the significance of the word schizophrenic in the intro might be pretty well confused, so much so as to give up the beautiful but weird adventure of reading it further after the first 20 sentences or so. Not everybody may be able to stomach and digest passages like the following:

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Good morning greeted Me and Myself, to which I replied “What’s up?”

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Well, Me recognizing an opening when he saw one, blurted out “We want to change the world and need you to see how we can do it”. I was familiar with his friends vagaries so he did not blink an eye as he replied “How can we change thee, let us count the ways”, (I liked to wax philosophical). “Consider this, we could each stand in a different spot and that would change the global positioning of humanity, or we could plant some seeds and that would change the plant population, the possibilities are endless.” “No, no we want to change the world so all people are treated fairly,” said Myself.

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A clue to understand the fabric of this novel is the fact that double or multiple personality is a distinguishing feature of schizophrenia, along with communication with a higher or different force or entity, both features being present here. Luckily, I could spot this connection in the background of my medical knowledge. I wonder how many among the general readers would be able to appreciate this.

This novel is for the initiated. Those looking for cheap fun or cosy bed-time reading would do well to avoid it.

M C Gupta
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From: M Duci (12)


Reading the entire work put such an awesome light on
this wonderful story. I know this should been a contining drama on TV, HBO, etc. This is just what we need in today's society. A line that stands out for me and there were so many is 'If understanding was sought you must first stop looking. It will reveal itself it's own way.' I love those three that are one, somehow just the words brought tears to my eyes. And the thought that as student of Mediphysical upbringings I felt the need to say 'I am that I am.'
If you ever think about running for office of any kind,
'President' please let me know! I'll be the first to go and vote for you, K_I.
Thank you for this wonderful work.
M Duci
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From: StephanieMichelle (1)


Lovin it...Really lovin it... U got some talent there, huh. I look forward to reading all those books and stories you've got. Keep writing...its a good thing...for you and most definely for me. I am enjoying all your pieces. I can't wait to lay my eyes on another.
Keep on doin the thing you do.
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Bless this talented writer. I hear my story being told quite vividly. I am the Momther of an adult Paranoid Schezophrenia. Trust me he also knows how to use it to his advantage. From an adolescent I'd had him in theraphy etc. The system has engrained upon his psyche that, "He's mentally incompetent", and he knows that he can do WHATEVER, and pull that excuse. As I've told him on numerous occassios, to please take his meds, and take control by shutting off those voices in his head. You couldn't have described myself and any others with, me myself, and I. My respose on bad days of dealing with my son, I'd tell him, "today, it's just me, myself, and I, cause I need a sabbatical to reclaim the sweet peace that's snatched, when "the voices come". I honestly enjoyed this to the maximum. It wasn't one that peaked your interest with the first few paragraphs, then it became a "put downer for later;which doesn't seem to come forth. Please continue to allow the words to flow; speaking for much of society .
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From: Rosealder. (22)


Wow, what a great work of fiction. So much thought has gone into this. I am impressed.
The writing is crisp and clean. The plot, well it is far removed from the mundane or predictable. I take my hat off to you.
The characters? *LOL* So well portrayed, the conflict between identities is wonderful. Humour and poignant emotion are well combined. Deep thought, combined with wit in perfect proportions.
I applaud your efforts and give this five stars!
All the Best for 2006!



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