Red Shoes

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number of reviews it has already received since it was written in 2006. I keep it to show me how I started vs where I am now.
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Red Shoes



Siren red, open toes, slender straps that slip around my ankles,

Sleek but so much more than I should spend. I looked at others,

Less glamorous, more subtle, shorter, smarter, easier to slide on.

I left the shoes behind. Instead, I bought more books and coffee.


That night, I dreamt of receding tides, of fleeting clouds, of red shoes

Languishing among the pebbles at water's edge, of fish in pursuit.

Of the tide rushing, whirling, pulling the shoes out of sight

Where even the seagulls, diving with great precision, can't find me.




Inspired by RC Flynn, poet.
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A Memorable Review:

This is a wonderful poem filled with unending symbolism. I detect references to longing and desire as well as will power and determination.

The red shoes seem to symbolize a need for something out of reach. By portraying the shoes later in a dream, you emphasize the personal aspect that the shoes represent. The ending implies that you would lose a part of yourself if you were to give in and buy the shoes.

That said, you've done a great job with the theme and mood of the poem. The aura is both whimsical and thoughtful and is consistent throughout.

Also, the flow of the poem is wonderful. I like how you have maintained a steady rhythm without a specific structure.

Great work.

sunshineandc