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Love Song
A ballad in anapestic tetrameter. I wanted to see if I could write a poem; you tell me.
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Note on style and meter.
This is an attempt at anapestic tetrameter. An anapestic foot is two unstressed syllables followed by a stressed syllable. A line of anapestic tetrameter is four of these in a row:
da da DUM da da DUM da da DUM da da DUM

The rhyme scheme is ababbcbc for three verses, with the final verse bcbc. Traditionally the last line of each verse of a ballad is a refrain that repeats in all four verses. This poem deviates slightly in that the the final line of the last verse is slightly different.

This is my very first attempt at any kind of poetry, so feedback is greatly appreciated!



Love song


When our bodies and souls in the darkness of night
Lay together in bed and share rest and repose,
Then do whispers divine and exalted give light
To the life that we share and the love that one knows
Will forever be held in our bosoms and souls.
In the night we are naked, our hearts we reveal.
In our love and our coupling we long to dispose
That great distance between us that love can't repeal.

We first met in the spring when the flowers so bright
Were abloom in their beds, all in careful tableaux.
I was drawn to your beauty and sought to invite
You to join me and stroll in the trees that enclose
That fair glade where we met and where love first arose.
With a touch to my hand and a kiss you did seal
The one love that we share to protect and oppose
That great distance between us that love can't repeal.

As we age, for the span of our lives we do fight
To return to the days of our youth when the rose
Of our love first did bloom and before it took flight.
We are lost in the rush of a living that flows,
Of a life that is spent in the moment. It knows
Little mercy for love that we share, an ordeal
We endure to a song that is harsh, as it shows
That great distance between us that love can't repeal.

How I miss you, my love, both your highs and my lows.
Our two hearts, once so warm, now alone, mine is steel.
I endure to a dirge from the void, one that shows
That great distance between us that death does reveal.


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