DT#5

Example 1:
I hear the voices and see the setting in this one. To me, Jack is fed up, agitated, and hurting. I picture him early middle age, your average jean-wearing-casual guy. Un-kept hair, perhaps a beard. Afram is a typical liquor store clerk and trying to make small talk with a regular customer.

Example 2:
This one is confusing. Wen I first read this I thought the character may be locked up or should be...then I said ok, off-world..aliens?  Four hands would be handy, especially for multitasking but I am not sure what to make of this one. I hear the voice and it takes you into very many possibilities, maybe that was the purpose?

Example 3:
I love this one and clearly heard the voice and setting with this one. Older southern couple, daughter in trouble with drugs and a bad bunch of people. Ellie has that mothers unconditional love towards and Mimi and Caleb shares her view, but he is just being a father who thinks Mimi will learn more from a lesson first hand, yet doesn't want her to get hurt. He is also concerned for his wife's welfare with her going to a bad part of town.

In my own writing, my stories are character driven, their actions and words develop the story.

My personal voice is a mix of seriousness and a little comedy. My sentences would go on and on if I let them, is there a class for that?