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  >> Static Item >> Poetry >> Relationship >> ID #1566213  |   Show DetailsPrinter Friendly Page Tell A Friend
Worth the Wait
...wishing you were here, wondering why you're not...
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original:

How pathetic is this waiting game I play?

Wishing you were here
(wondering why you’re not

I sit here under the brilliant sun
As ten becomes twenty
Twenty becomes thirty
Thirty becomes one hour
(one hour of my life that I’ll never get back)

Wasted.

All this
Because of the tiny chance
I might see you.

And that we will pass the time
Talking
Laughing
Being happy
(being ourselves)

But more often than not,
You don't appear.
My eagerness is replaced
By disappointment all too quickly.

The glow of the summer sun fades

(and yet maybe an hour wasted is worth
the happiness that overwhelms me
when I win the waiting game)




Revised to make the shape of an hourglass:

How pathetic is this waiting game I play? Wishing you were here

(wondering why you’re not) I sit here under the brilliant sun

as ten becomes twenty…twenty becomes thirty…

thirty becomes one hour (one hour of my life

that I’ll never get back).
Wasted.

All this because of the

tiny chance I might

see you.

And

that we

will pass the

time…talking…laughing…

being happy (being ourselves)

But more often than not, I don’t see you.

My eagerness is replaced by disappointment

all too quickly. The glow of the summer sun fades,

taking with it my hope. (and yet maybe an hour wasted is worth

the happiness that overwhelms me when I win the waiting game)



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