Candy-Coated Eve

Candy-Coated Eve



I gaze in your eyes and believe.
Your sweetness lies upon my tongue,
a melody yet to be sung,
a promise from the fruit of Eve.

You whisper words meant to deceive.
They shine so brightly in the light
that I can't see the coming night
that hides the dark shadow of Eve.

It is a shell to which I cleave.
The heart inside's an empty place
that echoes of my fall from grace
into the cold embrace of Eve.

I gaze in your eyes and believe.
You whisper words meant to deceive.
It is a shell to which I cleave,
simply a candy-coated Eve.


Notes

An entry for Round 5 "Rhythm & Rhyme Poetry Challenge"  [E]
Prompt: Image
Form: My Own - build your own structured form! You can use meter, rhyme, refrain, anything at all! Make sure that you list your created form at the bottom of your item so I can tell if you followed your own rules correctly. NOTE: This is NOT free verse.
My "Form" - hereby dubbed the "Sensual Brook" because it involves all the senses as it babbles on - any similarity to first names of the primary judges is purely coincidental - is a 16 line poem written in:
Meter: tetrameter in anything BUT iambic LOL
Rhyme: 3 - Quatrains in abba; final quatrain in monorhyme
Structure: First lines of each preceding quatrain form the final quatrain.

Thank you for taking time to read my words. I would appreciate it if you took a moment and left a comment. Your reaction, impressions, criticisms, - yes, even praise are all equally welcome.

Ken