Lesson 7 Part 2: take those out!

From "Divine Inspiration" 

Childish laughter echoed against the bare white walls. Flashes of green, then blue, then red light blinded the tall man standing in the center of the room. Frowning, he covered his grey eyes against the bright light.

His whiskered mouth twitched before he spoke. “You stop this right now! It’s time, and you know it!”

Giggling was the only response he got as the intensity of the flashing lights increased.

Knowing there was no arguing with it once it entered play mode, he sighed and dropped into the oversized armchair that appeared behind him, rumpling his pressed grey suit. Resting his balding head against the back, he reached down and pulled the lever to raise the foot rest and lean the chair back. It lifted up his long legs into a very comfortable position and stretched out his spine. He closed his eyes, prepared to wait out the coming storm.

The colored lights stopped and he cracked one eye open. Soft white light illuminated the room as usual. Out of nowhere and everywhere, bubbles of all shapes and sizes floated around the room. A particularly large teddy bear zoomed right at him. He closed his eyes as the bubble popped on his elongated nose, covering him in soapy wetness.

“Not having a good morning, are ya, Be?” a deep voice boomed in his ears.

His eyes flashed opened and stared up at the chubby face of his coworker, his only source of sanity in their eons-long position as glorified delivery boys. He smiled weakly. “You could say that, Ay.”

Ay glanced around, beads of sweat running down his face. “Don’t think you could convince it to turn the heat down.”

Be bit his lip, not feeling warm at all, but not wanting to hurt Ay’s feelings. “It doesn’t seem to be paying any attention to me today. What about yours? Did you get it to go down to earth yet?”


Rewritten Version
Laughter in high pitches echoed against the white walls that were bare of decorations. Flashes of green, then blue, then red light blinded the man standing in the center of the room. As thin as a flagpole, he looked like a child’s stick figure drawing. Frowning, he covered his grey eyes against the flashing lights.

The whiskers above his mouth twitched before he spoke. “You stop this right now! It’s time, and you know it!”

Giggling was the only response he got as the intensity of the flashing lights increased.

Knowing there was no arguing with it once it entered play mode, he sighed and dropped into the armchair that appeared behind him, rumpling his grey suit. Resting his head against the back, he reached down and pulled the lever to raise the foot rest and lean the chair back. It lifted up his legs and stretched out his spine. He closed his eyes, prepared to wait out the coming storm.

The flashing lights stopped and he cracked one eye open. A white light illuminated the room as usual. Out of nowhere and everywhere, bubbles of all shapes and sizes floated around the room. A teddy bear the size of a toddler zoomed right at him. He closed his eyes as the bubble popped on the tip of his nose, covering him in soap and water.
“Not having a good morning, are ya, Be?” a voice boomed in his ears.

Be’s eyes flashed opened and stared up at the face of his coworker who was as large as Be was thin. A corner of Be’s lips lifted upward, “You could say that, Ay.” Ay was his only source of sanity in their eons-long position as glorified delivery boys.

Ay glanced around, beads of sweat running down his face. “Don’t think you could convince it to turn the heat down.”

Be bit his lip, not feeling warm at all, but not wanting to hurt Ay’s feelings. “It doesn’t seem to be paying any attention to me today. What about yours? Did you get it to go down to earth yet?”