Review of Winter Blues

"I am reviewing this for Challenge 7 in the Paper Doll Gang."

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention
of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:
A good title that fits the theme of your poem and your
longing for Spring.

Form/Style:
Form: the Lune - similar to Haiku which I enjoy. Skillfully written
Lune. Perfect form, using both styles:
3 syllables 5 syllables 3 syllables (stanzas 1, 3, & 4)
3 words 5 words 3 words (stanza 2)

Imagery:
Very nice as are the descriptives. You paint a picture
of warmth, new life and beauty of the season, the spring
rain, much like snapshots in each lune.

Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are
well done. Very nice rhythm, very smooth linking well
with the following lunes.

Metaphor or Simile:
Nice use of metaphor "old man winter" asking it to
flee.

Tone:
Lovely depth of feeling; you express your longing
for spring to come, to hear birds sing their praises
and the joy it brings you. This I can relate to
very well. To see the blossoms of new life warms my
heart. I look forward to it every year.

Word Choice:
Word choice is good. Very nice use of repetition for
emphasis of the longing for the season and your joy
of it. Nice alliteration.

Overall:
Well penned and a most enjoyable read. I look forward
to writing in this form. You made it look so easy
and it looks like a fun form. Write on.

Hi Hannah, would you please critique my review?
Much appreciated. Shelley

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