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  >> Static Item >> Poetry >> Dark >> ID #1764885  |   Show DetailsPrinter Friendly Page Tell A Friend
Black Rain
When darkness overwhelms the mind. (Form: Trijan Refrain)
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Black Rain



Water runlets paint my windows;
the rain tattooing down.
Passing cars casting lambent glows
bejeweling nature's crown.
A gift of life lies in the gale;
the glass obscures as I exhale.
         A gift of life.
         A gift of life
that calls the heart to no avail.

Water runlets paint my windows;
they reign over my mood,
reminding me of how time flows.
There's no chance to elude.
The dirge-like sound corrupts my brain.
Will I ever see the sun again?
         The dirge-like sound.
         The dirge-like sound
brings darkness sung in words arcane.

Water runlets paint my windows
in scenes that seem so bleak.
I feel the walls as they enclose;
they forbid me to speak.
Suffocating in my madness,
nothing's left except for sadness.
         Suffocating.
         Suffocating
as I await death's soft caress.


Notes
An entry for "COLORING THE WORLD CONTEST
Prompt: Rain
Form: Trijan Refrain
The Trijan Refrain, created by Jan Turner, consists of three 9-line stanzas, for a total of 27 lines. Line 1 is the same in all three stanzas, although a variation of the form is not to repeat the same line at the beginning of each stanza. In other words, the beginning line of each stanza can be different. The first four syllables of line 5 in each stanza are repeated as the double-refrain for lines 7 and 8. The Trijan Refrain is a rhyming poem with a set meter and rhyme scheme as follows:
Rhyme scheme: a/b/a/b/c/c/d,d refrain of first 4 words of line five /c
Meter: 8/6/8/6/8/8/4, 4 refrain/8


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Ken
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