Perfect 10, Assignment 1

Good evening!

I am reviewing your short story, 'Doomsayer' as an assignment for "Rockin Review Study Guide" .

First of all, I would like to congratulate you for writing a fun and meaningful piece! I enjoyed the read and expect others have as well.

A few quick comments for you, and I'll leave you alone. .

1) I enjoyed the dichotomy you presented between humor and doom. I honestly didn't know if the townsfolk were laughing with or at Cooley until his last line. The uncertainty kept me intrigued, and the ending left me relieved. Keep that!

2) I am not an expert at grammar, so I won't delve into too many specifics. However, there were a few occasions where I felt that your use of punctuation was either incorrect, or left confusion as to how your sentences were meant to be read. A few (but not all) examples:
-This was the legendary Cooley Jason had heard
-At first I thought his full name was Cooley Jason.

-This year the sign again read, THE END IS COMING.
-Pretty sure the text on the sign should be in single or double quotes.

-people stopped and stared and waved at Cooley
-Possibly poetic, but you shouldn't use that many conjunctions in one sentence. (I believe a comma or two instead would be appropriate)

3) I would definitely look into the proper use of commas and conjunctions with regard to dependent and independent clauses. This is a common weakness among authors (myself included) and is almost always deserving of a review.

4) I am glad you kept the piece light and still meaningful. Expand upon that! With a bit more depth you can turn this into a really neat piece of work!

Write on!

-Werewolf