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They Know They've Won!
revision (complete) of INTERRUPTION! for "From the Ground Up" class
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THEY KNOW THEY'VE WON!

Six cats in small room make me want to run!
Disaster cuddles with me as I write.
Cute faces melt my heart--they know they've won!

They're much more fun than if I just had one!
Quiet is now a thing of my past light.
Cute faces melt my heart--they know they've won.

I think after these six, my herd is done.
All they ever agree on is to fight!
Six cats in small room make me want to run.

No matter what, I love them all a ton.
Whatever's up, they rarely get it right
Cute faces melt my heart--they know they've won!

They always cause wild ambiance of fun.
(And, never wait to wake up with the sun!)
Six cats in small room make me want to run.

And, always in my heart they're NUMBER ONE!
(Sometimes, they make me grit my teeth and hum.)
Six cats in small room make me want to run.
Cute faces melt my heart--they know they've WON!.

(former version, edited by Karen:


I revised the poem for the refrain line issue:

INTERRUPTION

Six cats in small room cause interruption! -- alliteration six/small – assonance small/cause
Disaster cuddles with me as I write.
Cute faces melt my heart as I press on. –assonance melt/press

They’re much more fun than if I just had one, - internal rhyme fun/one
Quiet is now a thing of my past life!
Six cats in small room cause interruption!

I think after these SIX, my herd is done! –alliteration think/these - assonance after/herd
All they ever agree on is to fight!
Cute faces melt my heart as I press on

No matter what, J love them all a ton! --assonance love/ton
No matter what, they rarely get it right.—alliteration rarely/right
Six cats in small room cause interruption!

They always cause an atmosphere of fun! --assonance an/atmos
(And never wait to wake up with the sun!) – alliteration wait/wake
Cute faces melt my heart as I press on.

And, always in my heart, they’re number ONE.
(Sometimes, they make me want to hide or run!)
Six cats in small room cause interruption.
Cute faces melt my heart as I press on!


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