Lesson #4 DT

ID: 1847229   (Rated: E) Lesson #4 DT  Comments on students' submission of work by chip

Comment on at least two of your classmates sentences. Do you see any errors in their exercise?



Rule #4b - Essential Elements (don't use commas)

My brother Stephen has a large collection of video games.


Hi:Ida_Matilda_Wright:

Suppose Stephen was your only brother? Reading your sentence means you have more than one brother, Right?

So, according to the rules, you are good, but how is the reader to know you have more than one brother,
if they don't know our rules?

For those not knowing our rules, we could write: Stephen one of my brothers, has a large....

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Another comment, but no advice or rule question.



Rule #11 - Absolute Phrases (use commas)

Laura’s friends, who prayed non-stop for her to live, were there ever day to help her and her family.


Thank you for a great example. I hope it isn't too bad to have studentes teach others.


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Lana:

Thanks for putting me in you example for coordinatng adjectives. You might have encluded, Chip is a remarkable, happy, dead, old, SFO man, as all these adjectives may be removed.