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American Haiku ... ish [224]

Is this a haiku? A Japanese haiku? No. An American haiku? Maybe.

One cherry blossom
settles on a toddler's nose:
first tears now giggles.

© Kåre Enga [177.224] (12.oktober.2020)

1. length (11-17max) = 17 syllables is so American... will you forgive me.
2. cutting word (two parts) = punctation
3. nature/season word = spring (cherry blossom)
4. observation, no emotion provided = ? seems okay as the emotion response is observed and doesn't come from the poet. ("she crosses her eyes" may be better.)
5: does this (juxtaposition of two parts) evoke emotion = maybe

6: overall = may be okay

My use of symbols:

= success. (cutting: 2 parts not 1 nor 3)
= may be okay or acceptable. (length = 11-17max)
= prose not poetry, abstract not concrete.
= fail (white is the color of death in the Far East)

Seasons:

= spring
= summer
= autumn
=winter

or something similar and natural:

May denote a season...

... except in Ireland or anywhere without a dry season.
... except in Chicago, Wichita, Buffalo or anywhere it's windy.
... maybe spring (March-June) in Oklahoma.
... end of autumn in the North; end of summer in Costa Rica.
a symbol of winter (January) in Japan. No particular season in Seattle nor elsewhere but associated more with winter.
spring-early summer in Kansas. (April-May-June)
dry summer in the plains. (August)

spring after the daffodils (March-April-May)
tulips aren't blue ... just saying.
fruit harvest (June-July)
is this a sunflower? If so, end-ofsummer (August-September)
summer ... if you are lucky.
autumn.
autumn harvest (September-October)

A calendar symbol (tend to be abstract) seldom based on nature:

November 1-2, Day of the Dead in Montana. But not everywhere.
Halloween. (pumpkin is seasonal)
Christmas. (a tree would be seasonal)
Easter or Christian.
Chanukah.

Natural but not seasonal:

Some bugs are ... but roaches aren't seasonal.
not ... unless you have surfing season or storms. (typhoons)
either you have it or you don't. Not very seasonal unless you have wet/dry seasons. In Costa Rica this would be January-March while would be October.