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Well, my one story is about a mob hood.Ultimately, he rips a boss and is whacked.
Every time I start I get a page or two and it just sounds "Boring" liike a newsfeed or a documentary.
I began with describing the neighborhood through his eyes. Another time it was about him telling his past .

Boring Boring Boring

So anybody hare any thoughts - - is there something that should be put into the mix

This is the very start page one, chapter one.


I know what my plot is and my character descriptions I even have an outline it just sound boring--- maybe it is just one of those ideas I need to scap.
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I'm interested in reading what you think before going that road - last ditch-effort.