Only Chapter One

You're welcome for the review.

My two main concerns, to be honest, are polishing the opening hook so that it's not quite so confusing and making the protagonist more appealing to readers.

You need some confusion in the opening to create your hook, but if that goes on for more than one paragraph and is too confusing, you'll lose your reader's interest.

If your reader doesn't identify with the protagonist, they won't care what happens to him, and again you'll lose the reader.

The aim is to hook and engage your reader then immerse them in your world, not keep them at a distance.

Thank you for the gps!

Bob