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Hi, I'm new on here and I wanted to ask writers about this idea I have. I'm already on Chapter 7 but I'd like to hear anything at all on it. Here goes:

A couple of years back from when it's set, a new piece of software is released called a P.O.S.T.-Personal Online Socialising Transponder. It's most popular feature is how it allows others to connect with their peers around the world, and is particularly popular among the new generation as they meet others from across the globe. Unfortunately, this also leads to a rise in extremist thoughts as movements in youth are more vocal online. In particular, a belief called unitarianism, where the whole world is united as one state, becomes well known among the young people of the world, but not to the governments in charge. Additionally, an online, international organisation calling itself the Syndicate rises in the P.O.S.T., hidden from others but known by all who use one.

One day, a girl called Aya moves to a new school near London, and notices that some of the students are acting differently, almost militaristic in a sense. She later finds out that this is because the leader of the Syndicate, a 15 year old boy called Mali, goes to this school, and most of the students are members. The two quickly become friends, and eventually lovers. Aya is never fully aware of Mali's plans for the Syndicate, but she tries to make it more peaceful and helps Mali change himself.

For a while Aya succeeds, but then disaster strikes. Mali's little sister, who he loves dearly, gets killed in a car crash, along with his parents. This leaves Mali with no restrictions from operating as Syndic Director once again, he unfreezes the Syndicate and confronts Aya to tell her his plans for the world.

Mali wants the world to unite, and does so by planning a revolution, in every country at the same time. He is spending years slowly recruiting members and gathering weapons, and will spend several more to ensure no mistakes. Aya tries to reason with him, but nothing will work and he offers her to join him, she leaves without accepting.

Later, Aya decides that she cannot join Mali, but she cannot also just watch as he takes over the planet. Instead, she forms her own group, and will attempt to counteract his plans and ensure the world remains free.

That's book one summarised, and the rest is essentially where Aya defeats Mali's forces in North and South Korea, which is soon destroyed by nuclear weapons. She evacuates many people and rendezvoused with other nations'armed forces, spend the next decade fighting the Syndicate's dictatorship, and eventually infiltrates Mali's capital of New London to find out whether she will have it in her to kill the man she loved. That's about 3 more books I reckon, but a bit in between I haven't mentioned.

I know it's a bit long, but what do you think of it? I'd appreciate any feedback and am planning on holding this through for a lengthy novel. Thank you for getting this far, please reply!