Hello.

Here were my comments:

1) Joe Belinski couldn’t (could not. It sounds more complete fully written).
2) Include space lines between paragraphs to make it easier to review.
3)The General leaned in, closer to Joe. “The messages.” (Capitalize Messages for emphasis)
4)Several cold (cold doesn't seem appropriate. Try using a different adjective) minutes later
5)was turning a fresher (what do you mean? I can't picture how "fresher" looks) shade of white.
6)I liked the dialogue because it gave each character his own voice.
7) The introduction captured my attention. Great job!
8) The conclusion is very mysterious. I'm eager to know the continuation.

Overall, I enjoyed the story very much. Maybe if you could add more visual and description. That would be great!

Keep up the good work.