Hello, I am PandaPaws and I am reviewing this piece as part of the Simply Positive Group!
I found this piece in your port while completing Day one of the 30DBC!

WOW! I am deeply impressed with your poetry!

TITLE: Your choice of title (and of course the first word of your poem) gains the reader's attention, pulling us from whatever we were doing and drawing us into your piece.

THEME: Your theme, to me, is the battle of good and evil, beauty and ugliness.

TONE: Your tone begins as beauty and then gives way to the mundane ugliness of life. With the parting of the fairy comes the disgust of 'normal' living.

PACE and FLOW: The pace is quick, the lack of abundance of punctuation and the lack of capitalization helps us flow from one line to the other. Our mind takes the pauses naturally when the poem is read aloud. You have done a wonderful job with both pace and flow in this piece.

FIGURATIVE LANGUAGE: Your imagery paints a vivid picture of your thoughts in this poem. I LOVED it!

SPELLING/GRAMMAR: I noted no errors in spelling or grammar.

AREAS FOR IMPROVEMENT: I saw no areas needing improvement!

EXCELLENT WRITING EXAMPLES: My favorite lines, because of their imagery were...

gracefully wafting
through discord and battle
amongst invisible foes
softly inspiring survival
tomorrow's nightmares trailing behind
life blooms in her shadow of majesty

Excellent Work!


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