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 Ice  [E]
A poem about ice for The Challenge
by Schnujo is Late to Lannister
Review of Ice  
Review by Jay O'Toole
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Schnujo, thanks for the privilege of reviewing your poem. These are, of course, my thoughts, but I do hope they will encourage you in some way.

*ButtonV*Overall Impression: Ice is both the subject of the poem as well as being the bookends of the poem. Excellent device! You explain the uniquenesses of ice, which include its benefits and its liabilities. These are important to note. You have done so nicely! :D

*Pencil*Suggestions: This is more of a personal preference, really. I am, personally, drawn to poems with rhyme and rhythm, but I am learning to appreciate the nuances of free verse. Free verse seems to lend itself nicely to this subject, since ice will never be put in anyone's box. Ice goes where it wants to go.

*Apple*Punctuation/Spelling/Grammar: This element fits the poem.

*Heart*What I Like: I like the fact that you have reminded us of things we all know, packaging it in a way, that makes us exclaim, "Yeah! That's right!"

Great poem! Nicely done! Write on! :)

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