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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Hello, Lauriemariepea How are you doing today? I'm working on reviewing different genres for "Invalid Item and stumbled upon your item, "Invalid Item. I hope this review finds you well! Thanks for sharing your writing with us. *Sun* *Cool*

*Right* General Thoughts: I chose to read this story because there was a juxtaposition between the title and the genre that intrigued me. Typically, I would think of a ladybug in the grass as being a symbol of summer and generally good vibes. The imagery doesn't conjure up any feelings of horror in me, so I was interested in seeing which way you took the story that put it in the horror genre.

The opening lines were a great hook and set up the scene very well. I can almost feel the thick grass and the hot summer breeze. You definitely have a talent of working with imagery to put the reader in the moment. I wasn't expecting the ending at all, until Kyle started thinking of the book passage. This was a super atmospheric horror story with implied horror elements. I really enjoyed it! *Heart*



*Right* Suggestions: I've looked and looked, but haven't found any grammatical errors or things that need to be improved with this piece. It was such a short story, but the characters were well-developed and definitely believable. The horror comes more from the fear the reader has for Melody at the end of the story, especially considering the fact that Kyle seems like a typical boy who just doesn't want to be bothered by an annoying little girl. No complaints here!


*Right* Conclusion: I'm happy I stumbled upon your port and this story. It's a great example of what can be done within the horror genre to create an atmospheric tale of soon-to-be monstrous acts and it is done in such an implicit, yet innocent way. Great read; thanks again for sharing. *Smile*


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