Dieting for Dummies [E] Another humor column submission |
HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews" Hello, Rubberchicken How are you doing today? I'm working on reviewing different genres for "Invalid Item" and stumbled upon your item, "Dieting for Dummies" . I hope this review finds you well! Thanks for sharing your writing with us. General Thoughts: I chose to read this humorous article because if I was dieting, it would be dieting for a dummy. I will curse the day when my metabolism gives up and I have to actually touch the doorhandles of gyms. It sounds like a total nightmare situation! I thought this article was really funny. It made me smile and laugh a bit at times. You have a good grasp on your audience and the type of people who would laugh at this. I loved the Macy's Day Parade blimp. My favorite part though was: I’ll turn the knob on the scales back a little, but it tends to alarm my wife. (“Honey, the cat doesn’t weigh anything.”) That totally cracked me up. I don't think I'll come to you for weight loss advice though. Not if it involves wearing meat around my neck and hanging with a pack of pit bulls. Suggestions: I thought the flow could be a little more smooth throughout the essay. It seemed like there were a lot of individual kind of one-liners, for lack of better phrasing, that didn't necessarily flow with the thought that came before or after. Other than that, I thought everything was great. I didn't notice any grammatical or spelling errors. Conclusion: Thanks again for sharing your funny article with us. I laughed a lot while reading it and was thoroughly entertained! Best wishes, ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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