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 Dieting for Dummies  [E]
Another humor column submission
by Rubberchicken
Review by Charlie ~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello, Rubberchicken How are you doing today? I'm working on reviewing different genres for "Invalid Item and stumbled upon your item, "Dieting for Dummies. I hope this review finds you well! Thanks for sharing your writing with us. *Sun* *Cool*

*Right* General Thoughts: I chose to read this humorous article because if I was dieting, it would be dieting for a dummy. *Laugh* I will curse the day when my metabolism gives up and I have to actually touch the doorhandles of gyms. It sounds like a total nightmare situation!

I thought this article was really funny. It made me smile and laugh a bit at times. You have a good grasp on your audience and the type of people who would laugh at this. I loved the Macy's Day Parade blimp. *Laugh* My favorite part though was:

I’ll turn the knob on the scales back a little, but it tends to alarm my wife. (“Honey, the cat doesn’t weigh anything.”)

*Rolling* That totally cracked me up. I don't think I'll come to you for weight loss advice though. Not if it involves wearing meat around my neck and hanging with a pack of pit bulls.



*Right* Suggestions: I thought the flow could be a little more smooth throughout the essay. It seemed like there were a lot of individual kind of one-liners, for lack of better phrasing, that didn't necessarily flow with the thought that came before or after.

Other than that, I thought everything was great. I didn't notice any grammatical or spelling errors. *Thumbsupr*



*Right* Conclusion: Thanks again for sharing your funny article with us. I laughed a lot while reading it and was thoroughly entertained! *Smile*


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