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PLOT -
Isobel cannot continue to see Ada, but cannot help herself one more time to be with the other woman.

SETTING -
Good descriptions of Ada with the bomber jacket and boots. I could picture her standing on the corner smoking while she waited. I did wonder what her apartment looked like, and if it reeked of cigarette smoke, and if that was a turn-on for Isobel.

CHARACTERS -
Isobel and Ada have an interesting relationship. While Isobel sees Ada as selfish, she can't seem to stay away from her, even though she continues to tell herself this is the last time they will be together.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/DIALOGUE -
Isobel ran a hand through her cinnamon hair in order to push it way - away from her face.

resting on - one hand on her hip while the other pulled her hair aside to fully expose the softest parts of her neck and shoulder.

The dialogue was natural. No other issues found.

THOUGHTS -
I liked Isobel fighting her feelings for Ada, knowing it was time to walk away but unable to at the moment. The ending left me wondering where this pair would go from here, and if Isobel would truly be able to walk away from her addiction.

Lost in a haze of purple she stands alone

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