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All right! (cheers on our intrepid narrator). A nice "step aside" interlude separating us from the horror of Chapter 1 (and I am sure the horrors to come *Bigsmile*. It is important to pause the escalating tension for a time, as well as to introduce some backstory (or perhaps in this case, sidestory). It was good to learn about the farm, the other town farmers, and the school (bully) situation, and about her softball skills and tribulations. I quite liked the way in which you added drama with these three bullies, and I hope they'll get to spend some time in that lush cornfield soon. Then they'll see what bullying really is...
Now I'm eager to see What or Who comes next.

I'd run a quick spelling/grammar check but I won't go into item by item. Very much enjoying this story.

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