Hello, ruwth !

I don't remember who exactly it was, but they sent me a link to this particular piece of yours. They told me they felt it was time to pass it to me, and that it would help me with understanding. Thank you for writing this so it could eventually come to me.

Ready for your review??

Genre
The genres listed for your item may fit the book but not this item. You may want, if you haven't already, to list the genres that fit this item in the "keywords" section when editing the book as a whole. This way people can find all the types of writing you include here. I would hate to see people miss out on this beautiful piece.

Grammatical Errors
a golden years blessing ~ I believe there should be an apostrophe at the end of "years" but you shouldn't quote me on this

Show me what to do ~ "Show" should be lowercase as it is part of the sentence that begins with "Father,"

I acknowledge your wisdom, your goodness, your love. ~ The word "your" should be capitalized in each instance in this sentence as it is referring to Him

I choose to trust you ~ "you" should be capitalized

you are good ~ "you" should be capitalized

Most of this is just simple capitalization and is not really a big deal. I just wanted to point these out to you if you wanted to make those changes.

Plot
This reads more like a very simple scene that you would find in a larger piece of prose. However, it really does have a beginning, a middle, and an end. The details of the beginning are found later in the work, but it is there. I like scenes and whole stories that are not quite linear. It leaves something to be discovered later.

Character Definition
Like the plot, details of the character are revealed slowly. This says a lot for your use of definition for your main, and really only, character. Unless you count Him, of course.

Descriptions
I would love to know the verse that you quote from the Bible. Maybe you can work that in naturally so that readers know where in the story of Jesus this was said.

I could very easily see the painting (even though there is also a picture of it) just because you mention the Fall colors, trees, and meandering dirt path. I think just about everyone would be able to envision this, but each in their own way. Even if the picture wasn't there.

Sitting on the bench, the dreary weather outside, etc. were also clearly visible, as well as clearly felt.

Suggestions for Improvement
I am one of those people that will pick up on most of the more technical aspects of a piece of writing. Even though the grammatical issues I pointed out were very minor, you still may want to correct them. Another reviewer may also pick up on anything I might have missed.

Other than this, I really see no room for improvement here.

Overall Impressions
Very succinctly, you have given me "the feels." This is very applicable to my life at the moment so seeing someone walk into a museum with so much weight on her heart, and leave with purpose, confidence, trust and more when it comes to their faith is... well, it is uplifting to me as well.

Thank you so much for writing this piece. I needed to read it at this particular point in my life. I'm so glad a mutual friend sent it to me, knowing I NEEDED to read it. This is a great work and I wish a lot of other people would read as well.




My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .