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Ibiza   [E]
A poem written about a disastrous summer holiday my friends and I experienced.
by Choconut ~ House Targaryen
Review of Ibiza  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello, Choconut ~ House Targaryen !

Thanks for your entry to "The Humorous Poetry Contest"  [18+].


*Cupcakey* Wowzers! That was some vaycay. *Laugh* Great job on the descriptions! The first verse sets the scene perfectly and it slowly goes from there to build up to a funny punchline. Nice!

*Cupcakeb* I could feel the emotional turmoil as things went a little crazy on this vacation. Losing just a passport is enough to call it a day. *Laugh* I thought each verse told it's own little story, and I thought it was a funny line to ask the question about the air conditioning. It's well-written, but the only thing that stood out to me was to maybe mention within the first verse that you were with friends, because when you toss names out, it could be a dog, or at first I thought you were with your husband. Just a tiny thing, but it's up to you. *Bigsmile*

*Cupcakep* I really enjoyed how this was built-up to the funny last line. I wasn't expecting it, so it made me laugh. I could picture the whole scene as the friends started to get on each other's nerves, and for sure, the last line is perfect. Way to go! *Stary*
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