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Baby Series  [13+]
Three friends, Two Left, One Taken.
by Laurie Razor
Review of Baby Series  
Review by runoffscribe
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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wonder what a goth keyboard looks like. I'm sure James Heyward has one. Would that be a pentagram in the lower lefthand corner?
         The gist of the Baby Series seems to be that three schoolgirls get themselves into a lifetime`of trouble beginning with a game of touch-and-go on the plane of the occult. The story takes jump after jump from place to year to character.
         For those who are familiar with the witchcraft sub-genre, I can see how this technique cuts out every scrap of fat and moves the story at a relentless pace. I, being less familiar, became well and thoroughly lost by the middle of the second of the series.
         The text seems to have almost no use for paragraphing. Concepts and events are presented with little exposition, related to others only by sequence. The bones of a gravid and shocking tale are all here. But there is little more here than the bones.
         In an earlier review, Review of "Capita" , I wrote about plot reliefs -- comic, tragic and idyllic. This story could use some expository relief, a breather from the breathless pace.
         Live long and publish, Laurie Razor.
         For notes on formatting, spelling and punctuation: "Note: I have begun to write boilerplate language in..."
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