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 A bus  [E]
just another day in the life of a bus
by tales of 6502
Review of A bus  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi tales of 6502,
This is a fantastic piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what is actually in the piece. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have made a statement on the vibrant, unpredictable moods of your people using the guise of a personified bus to make your point. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use a emotional style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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