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 My Writing Place  [E]
Writing Place
by SomaSilver
Review of My Writing Place  
Review by Past Member 'blimprider'
Rated: E | (5.0)
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         Good morning, SomaSilver . As requested, I have returned to write another review for you. I actually read everything in your portfolio, and I have to say, there's an awful lot of dark poetry here. If your well-being was my business, I might be worried, but this is a writing site, so I'll just assume that you're exploring a phase right now. I mentioned before how poetry is not a strong area of expertise with me, but you write a lot in free verse, so I chose one of those that has a more uplifting tone. Let's get into it.

         The voice of a girl under fire from her peers comes through clear and strong in this work, but here you talk about a place of refuge within yourself that no one can touch or sully. It's a poem of hope, of peace, of a personal strength that can't be taken from you. That is a very powerful thing to own, and lends the work a power of its own. This poem stands as an inspiration to all who might read it, and is a credit to its author.
         You mentioned in your e-mail that English is not your native language, so I wanted to address that. Granted, this is one small work, but I didn't find one misspelling or improper word usage. English is a language that borrows from many others, so we have P as in papa, H as in hotel, but put them together and they make F as in fox. Another way to get F is -ough as in cough and trough. There are three forms of too: To, too, and two, and you used the proper form and set it off between commas, which is also proper. You used the right form of "bare," to expose, as opposed to "bear," the animal, or to carry. English is rife with words that seem to mean one thing, but don't quite, and their misuse is rife even among native speakers. A common example is Star Trek's Spock who frequently uses "fortuitous" to mean "fortunate." It actually means "random." English is a language that is rife with traps and pitfalls, and in this piece, at least, you have avoided all of them. I tip my hat to you, Milady. You have done a wonderful job!

         And so I will leave you with five golden stars, well-deserved, and my encouragement to continue developing your writing. Even if you never sell a piece, even if you never even try, the act of writing will free your spirit and make you a better person. A young student like yourself has decades to grow, and writing will help the process in ways you can barely imagine. I thank you for sharing your work, and wish you all the best in all things always.

Read well, and write better,
*Skull* Jack "Blimprider" Tyler

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