Hello concrete_angel,

As a co-participant in "I Write in 2020" , it is my pleasure to review your contest entry.


Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
Such a romantic poem. I love the way you told the story. It was sweet and innocent as children then they sadly get separated.

It appears to me they are reunited at eighteen because she tells him that she missed him. It's so romantic that they were able to spend the rest of their lives together.


Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:
Grammar and spelling look fine. I won't address punctuation because punctuation in poetry is not my forte, lol.

Closing Comments:
Thanks for sharing this love story of a poem. I'm sure it will attract many fans!


Thank you for sharing your work.
Kindest Regards, Lilli

***Disclaimer***
The comments herein are just my humble opinions. Use whatever is useful; discard the rest. I'm not an editor, proof-reader, or any of the like. When I read and review, I am reading as a 'reader', to be entertained. I look to see how the piece makes me feel and if I can I visualize the story/poem in my head. You know your work better than anyone else! If I make a suggestion or a comment, it is meant in the spirit of 'helping' and I welcome the same when people review my work.



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .