Hello ruwth ,

As a co-participant in "I Write in 2020" , it is my pleasure to review your contest entry.


Overall Impression:
To be honest, at first, I was feeling bad for Teedy. The way the teacher singled her out, even though in a positive light, can bring about negative repercussions from jealous classmates. But, as I read the smile on my face grew wider. That clever and talented girl, Teedy!

Title / Description / Hook:
The title works for me.

Flow:
I like the flow of the story. It doesn't rush the reader though and does not drag either.

Scene/Setting:
As the prompt required, this is a classroom. I loved the mention of the desk and the way the top had to be opened to store belongings. I remember having desks like that!

Characters:
I enjoyed the character of the teacher. Because of the way you described the scene, I pictured her as a serious and rather stern instructor.

Teedy was nicely written, as well. Sitting there quietly satisfied with herself.

Dialogue:
There isn't lots of dialogue, but what is there is good and well done.

Emotional Content:
This story made me smile and had a hint of nostalgia.

Grammar and Mechanics:
She could also see a bright red A + in the top right hand corner of the first page.
consider hypenating 'right hand' here.

Closing thoughts:
A very enjoyable read!


Thank you for sharing your work.
Kindest Regards, Lilli

***Disclaimer***
The comments herein are just my humble opinions. Use whatever is useful; discard the rest. I'm not an editor, proof-reader, or any of the like. When I read and review, I am reading as a 'reader', to be entertained. I look to see how the piece makes me feel and if I can I visualize the story/poem in my head. You know your work better than anyone else! If I make a suggestion or a comment, it is meant in the spirit of 'helping' and I welcome the same when people review my work.



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .