Hello Bobby's !

I'm here with "The WDC Angel Army"  for this review. Let's get rolling!

Corrections/Suggestions

First impressions- This is a very short piece here. Basically one sentence that may need to be broken into two and have some punctuation with it. You have a good start here but I would say to expand it. Or, you could try line breaks within it so that it reads less like a sentence and more like lyrics. To have lyrics you'll have the main part, then you have the chorus, then back again. So, you could definitely expand this out.

Here's what my suggestion looks like:

Love is perfect
when it comes spiritually
because God is love

Then, you can have a chorus that is set up for this that repeats twice or so. I know I'm learning with writing lyrics for a contest but you have a start here. It's just to expand this out and make more depth for it.

Things Which I Enjoyed
I think that you have a good concept going here: I especially like the highness of that perfect love, that works quite nicely. You have a good concept/start here that can definitely be expanded.

Overall Comments
Overall, these lyrics are a good start to things but it just needs a little more and to be expanded with things. You have the concept, it's just moving forward from that. Thank you for sharing and keep on writing! =D



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