Hello 🌑 Darleen - QoD , Congratulations on completing all of the June activities and qualifying for the July mini challenge in the Promptly Poetry Contest! I popped over to your portfolio's folder to see if there was something I wanted to review for my part of the mini challenge and this poem of yours caught my eye. INITIAL IMPRESSION / OVERVIEW: I enjoyed your poem and could envision it as the start of a paranormal romance novel or short story. You did a great job with the Promptly Poetry Challenge prompt for a crosswalk story! MORE DETAILED FEEDBACK: Your poem is well written, flows nicely and evoked strong feelings in me as I read it. I had different expectations of what I would read based on the title but I enjoyed your poem even more than the one I subconsciously expected (the more modern ghosting). I liked how you structured your poem. I didn't notice any mistakes of any kind in your poem. I liked the cliffhanger feel to the ending of your poem. CONCLUSION: You wrote an enjoyable story poem that I greatly enjoyed reading. Well done! Thank you for sharing your paranormal poem with the writing.com community! May love, joy and peace be yours in abundance! PWheeler My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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