Hello Tinker ,

Congratulations on completing all of the June activities and qualifying for the July mini challenge in the Promptly Poetry Contest!

I popped over to your portfolio's folder to see if there was something I wanted to review for my part of the mini challenge and this poem of yours caught my eye. I remember reading it the week you wrote it and wanting to review it but not having the words. I still don't have the right words but I doubt they're going to come if they haven't already.

INITIAL IMPRESSION / OVERVIEW:
I enjoyed your poem and felt a kinship of bewilderment and shock as I read it. You succinctly described an insane time filled with shocking and terrible actions.

You did a great job with the Promptly Poetry Challenge prompt for a poem that includes the days of the week!

MORE DETAILED FEEDBACK:

My favorite line was: "Monday under curfew, what more will be?" Because, I suspect, that's what we're all wondering.

I was really glad to read your note and will pray for your deputy sheriff son. What a lot of people seem to forget is that most law enforcement is in it to serve in protect. The majority are the real deal. Unfortunately, where there are bad apples and they are allowed to operate, it can be a whole group and a whole community can suffer, to say the least. I have been and will continue praying that those with pure intentions rise to the top and are able to root out those with evil intentions.

I was super impressed that not only did you speak so eloquently in such a succinct way but also managed end line rhymes for the whole poem. Amazing!

Your poem is well written, flows nicely and evoked strong feelings in me as I read it.

I liked how you structured your poem.

I didn't notice any mistakes of any kind in your poem.

I liked the cliffhanger feel to the ending of your poem.

CONCLUSION:
You wrote an excellent poem that I greatly enjoyed reading. Well done!

Thank you for sharing your life experience poem with the writing.com community!

May love, joy and peace be yours in abundance!
PWheeler




My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .