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 | Summer Storm  [E] Poetry depicting how I enjoy watching a summer storm and going to sleep listening to them.  |
| (4.5)| Hello tj ~ endeavors to persevere! ,I'm Charlie ~ and I've selected your item, "Invalid Item" by A Guest Visitor , for reviewing today. The following feedback is merely the opinion of a fellow writer/reader. Use what is useful to you and throw the rest away.   General Thoughts: After reading this poem, I checked the weather report hoping for storms. Tomorrow maybe!  I love watching a storm roll in. I love the way the scent of the air changes and everything. I think you did a good job of capturing that electric excitement of a summer storm in your poem. And who doesn't sleep great when it's raining? I really enjoyed how this poem had a beginning, middle, and end. It wrapped up so nicely. My favorite part was the second stanza. Those first ominous signs of a storm incoming were well-written. I also like the imagery and word choice behind this line: no clouds to challenge sunshine. I've definitely seen those days.  Suggestions: I think the flow of the poem is pretty smooth throughout, but there are a couple spots where the rhythm is off to me when I read the poem. Not sure if there's an extra syllable in those lines or if it's just the word choice that throws me off. For example, I hasten to the house for shelter doesn't flow as well for me in that stanza as the other lines do. Conclusion: Overall, I think your poem achieves its purpose. As a fellow storm lover, I can see the imagery of this and I understand the enjoyment of watching a summer storm. Thanks for sharing your writing!Best, ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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